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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-05-19 02:17 PM


small talk in sinews that strain
around some magical slice of time
that has fallen from the jaws of day

in your eyes there is a ocean and a sky
and my arms are confused about being damp
or about surrounding cloud that bruise

you look the other way when you see me looking
the other way from nonchalantly accidental
as if it were something beside the road

when we both stopped and hoped for more traffic
so we had more time to wait for the green
and now greener is where we are holding moments

like they were each other's gloveless hands

_____________


daark


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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2009-05-19 02:31 PM


Yo Dark Stranger,

I like the way you use your words.  This is very fine writing.

Bobby

RedStoneEB
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2 posted 2009-05-19 03:03 PM


emotions are hard to form into words or carve into something that you look upon and say this is it this is what I meant to show the world this is where my heart is.

But still I get your feelings in this,

nice write

RedStone

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3 posted 2009-05-19 03:18 PM


BobbyJ, thanks guy!!

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thank you Redstone..I appreciate the glance

Kaoru
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4 posted 2009-05-20 12:05 PM


Loving this as well.
Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-05-20 12:29 PM


ms K...a pleasure to have your eyes here, thanks lady
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6 posted 2009-05-23 12:33 PM


Hey D!

I like the way you use words too.  And, I like the ocean and deserted, natural (grins) beaches with waves.  Yep, I do.

A

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-05-23 06:55 AM


ms ali-san..thanks babe
Margherita
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8 posted 2009-05-23 12:21 PM


quote:
small talk in sinews that strain
around some magical slice of time
that has fallen from the jaws of day

in your eyes there is a ocean and a sky
and my arms are confused about being damp
or about surrounding cloud that bruise



I find tenderness in these inspired words.
A momentary confusion brought a magical poem.

Love,
Margherita

1slick_lady
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9 posted 2009-05-23 03:36 PM


"in your eyes there is a ocean and a sky"

that is an incredible thing to say to someone

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2009-05-23 06:21 PM


ms mar, thanks lady friend

___________

ms slick..thanks babe

Artic Wind
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11 posted 2009-05-26 09:46 PM


Penned excellently! ~ Enjoyed the write


ARCTIC WIND

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2009-05-27 07:25 AM


thanks AW
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