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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-05-18 10:08 AM


When I look up at the ageless stars
So near, and so far
Looking all lost and all alone
In the void that they call home
Oh so fortunate they are

In the loving bosom of eternity
Cradled in a constancy
Carried aloft above the weight
Of the world unlike mortals too late
Such as I to be eaten by gravity

I wish not that fate so desperate
Upon any earthbound spirit
My sphere which I used to call my own
A very real home sweet home
I bleed with longing for it


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2009-05-18 10:30 PM


I do too, and I'm still here.

It's never going to be like it was, lovie.

Never. Even if this is a metaphor?

no.

Never.

I'm sooooo sorry, too.


Billie Cullimore
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since 2009-03-27
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2 posted 2009-05-19 02:06 AM


Come Back and let me hug you.  We all need a hug from time to time.


Beutifully done.
Billie C.

Chalmette Guy
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3 posted 2009-05-19 09:00 AM


I know that you know Karen. Thanks.
This was my first poem written after 'the event'.

And thank you too Billie, I sure wouldn't turn that down.

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4 posted 2009-05-19 01:23 PM


I wish not that fate so desperate
Upon any earthbound spirit
My sphere which I used to call my own
A very real home sweet home
I bleed with longing for it

This brings tears to my eyes... I know I just lost a home, not my entire world... but deep inside... I know, too... and I applaud your poignant write!!

shelerella75
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since 2009-01-30
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5 posted 2009-05-19 01:29 PM


I loved the concise thoughts of the last stanza, but this is my favorite line...

"In the loving bosom of eternity
Cradled in a constancy"

how it makes me long a bit too!  Lovely picture you paint, friend.

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