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Bloodline
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since 2009-05-23
Posts 236
Oklahoma

0 posted 2009-05-31 09:40 AM





Wild Ambition

The dirt road ends
And choke brush with briars
Stand as game trail sentinel,
An interloper approaches alone.
The forest birds
Watch in silence to see
If this lone visitor will enter
Their wild.
Unconquered insects wait patiently
For this hapless morsel.
A wistful eye glances backward
Then turns, willing a beating heart
To cross primeval threshold.

Senses thrill to the chorus
Of unseen welcomers,
Barking Squirrels chide this
Two-legged intruder,
Nervous Sparrows sing out
Eager for a view,
Distant Crows caw a warning omen
As this strange figure nears
The waters edge.
Early morning courage
Draws full length,
Keeping to the easy path.

Night or day the woodland never rests,
A raw sweetness beguiles
Each glade and hollow.
Soft sounds of a little stream
Pull cautious steps.
Humble fisherman with simple pole
And homemade offerings
Stands transfixed above a pristine
Honeyhole.
Here, this one will battle
With nature’s freshwater kings,
Undaunted by past failures!

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Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2009-05-31 10:01 AM


Wonderfully written, especially love the last stanza.

... undaunted by past failures

An advice to cherish in whatever situation requires patience.

Love,
Margherita

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2009-05-31 10:23 AM


Wow, this was so appealing...the fragrance of it took me over!

..."Night or day the woodland never rests,
A raw sweetness beguiles
Each glade and hollow.
Soft sounds of a little stream
Pull cautious steps.
Humble fisherman with simple pole
And homemade offerings
Stands transfixed above a pristine
Honeyhole.
Here, this one will battle
With nature’s freshwater kings,
Undaunted by past failures!"

Absolutely superb!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2009-05-31 12:44 PM


We all have the ability to rise above or at least come to terms with adversity.

Such beautiful visuals in which to get your message across.

Enjoyed, very much!!

Heart2Heart
Senior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 738
Scotland/Norway
4 posted 2009-05-31 01:58 PM


Oh such a vivid and verdant nature poem, loved this one Bloodline.  You have some truly wonderful descriptions in there.
Heart2Heart

Bloodline
Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236
Oklahoma
5 posted 2009-05-31 02:39 PM


Margherita, thank you, I'm still
learning to be patient in many things,

ThisDiamond, thank you so much
for your wonderful comments,

BluesSerenade, thank you for so
nice an insight,

Heart2Heart, from you dear Lady
such words encourage, wado,

Bloodline

Shadow Angel
Junior Member
since 2009-05-31
Posts 29
New Zealand
6 posted 2009-06-01 07:41 AM




~   I love the soul soothing call to stillness in this piece

this is the first I have read of you, Bloodline, and I am impressed, my friend
beautifully poured to the page, and very much enjoyed

*hugs*

Sasha xx


Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast
7 posted 2009-06-01 07:45 AM


enjoyed the verve of this, like a hive within a hive
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
8 posted 2009-06-02 10:31 AM


A most enjoyable read!  "Undaunted by past failures" but how those failures follow us and make us succumb before the battle has begun.  

Helen

Kaoru
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since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow
9 posted 2009-06-02 10:36 AM


Beauty.

Enjoyed your writing.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
10 posted 2009-06-02 11:51 AM


I'm grabbing my fishing pole and heading for that idyllic "Honeyhole".

Besides the "Natural" beauty of this enchanting poem, I also appreciated the message within!


EA

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