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With the Chimes.
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With the Chimes. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Here you come down with the rain.. I cannot bear the weight of your words, they are so alone in the moments, like drifting echoes, so careless as to the ears they fall upon. Never to experience the regret.. And my god, I held you so close, as if I were the one who owned you. I growled at wandering eyes, and I touched, every now and then, the night of your skin only for you to speak the silence and describe only ruin. Saying that my fingertips no longer felt like silk and to never wonder of you again.. My head hung low as you slept, soundly, though I pondered if you dreamed of my heartbreak, of my disappointment, and if you knew that in your presence I felt like a child. So small, and so weak, it was so hard to make you hear.. And now, I realize, it was just that you would refuse to listen to even my weeping in your ear. And now, no roses or gifts, not even a kiss could make this better, even though I beg for it to.. Burning my knees in reflection, not quite knowing what else I can do.. but to break you like you did me, and let you, your tongues language frozen like my glass, be alone in my wind..sweeping your harvest hair into your eyes so that you can no longer see me moving forward in my backwards feet. Crawling across the hot sands, like a snake in moaning ache. What more could you want? For there is nothing left to take, and nothing more I can create, not even forgiveness for your praying hands, they will become too tired to hold on anyway... And it was a folly of your youth, to believe you were immune, and a weakness to believe, I would not take the control from you. Next time you clench your fists so tight, I will imagine you frail like a web, easily destroyed and like a ghost I could blow you away with the chimes. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
ache and hearts have there place. not so much together I hear church bells, sirens most of all I here alarms ... it's hard to see and feel all possibilities when you think you have already found all that's right ... time shares everything |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I don't think I'd like being on your bad side ... delightful read ... shouts with emotion  Rex |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
You are some writer; you truly are. But why do I wonder if you really are where you say you are? Perhaps, because you still write of the subject with such passion. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And my god, I held you so close, as if I were the one who owned you. I growled at wandering eyes, and I touched, every now and then, the night of your skin only for you to speak the silence and describe only ruin. And then? And it was a folly of your youth, to believe you were immune, and a weakness to believe, I would not take the control from you. and THEN? and like a ghost I could blow you away with the chimes. * * * I do so love a killer last line...and I have such a thing for wind chimes that they are all over my house. (Inside) smile You made me remember a hot night so still, that when I heard the tinkle of the chimes, I knew it was not a breeze, but a flying roach... I shake my head and shudder. You dig deep. And you are provocative. I love that.  |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
You make me sad. Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: This, and several other lines, were magnificent! I'm so glad you're back! Not only to entertain us, but to thrill us as well! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is some writing. I feel like I am in one of those whirlpools, sucking in circles as I absorb each line and how they fit. I am really liking your poems. A |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"moving forward in my backwards feet" my fav line there are no words for me to describe your poetry i don't feel that when i read you that i read you i feel as if i live it with you new pic too way cool |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And now, I realize, it was just that you would refuse to listen to even my weeping in your ear. This is so gripping... and the ending is fantastic... I do love your work!!! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
What an unbelievable ending!!! You poetry is truly a rare and wonderful gift!! |
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Bloodline Member
since 2009-05-23
Posts 236Oklahoma |
Raw emotion with smooth wording that puts the reader in the mood and touch, lovely, Bloodline |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It is the people that hurt others the most that are the weakest... You have found that out and still weep for their loss. Consoling the weak is not a crime..letting it destroy who you are, is. and that is what I got from your words. Thank you. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wonderful write and if this is based on "real life" then I ditto Susan's words. Just feeling sad now at the thought of the process involved before being ... in control of the chimes. Helen |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Meghan, your poetry is always rife with unique turns of phrases! ~ Chock full of them! i.e. "your tongues language frozen like my glass," Gosh, girl! Yer goood!  Linda |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
I have not been here, in this site, for many many months, but I guess something hit me today for a reason, a very good reason. nice work as always |
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