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Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2009-05-13 11:33 PM



nothing else matters: ashes to ink:


even oceans would rise to meet his touch  
(i,f only)
the sand/s   would wave      

his dunes bare footprints
while the sea grass whispers
to its-self


the mystery of salt and tears

fill the space ,(in),between



speak your soul, because shadows know   and often never
tell why you pray when in silence

        as if nothing else matters:

every where
       flowers,
palms of hand,
leaves of time,
bare witness to being lonely

the spirit of some forgotten art

        right there --spoken from your mouth
watch as it falls blue

        again the tears come

when the mind can not endure such prayers

here in this thought       there are no seperate word/s--
     no seperate religion/s to follow

just     heart

when I can look to the temple of the stars and wish upon the sky

      more days pass--

bitter and cold winter/s --
crimson   petals--
and empty vases
no longer hold   their meaning

it makes liquid glass
   easy to ,break, bend, and melt


I can find you when looking at myself
        even now  I'mstill
stained at the edges

nothing else matters.



~~**~~
I never let one moment define me,
I define myself by all moments and how they teach and touch me......02  

© Copyright 2009 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2009-05-14 03:34 PM


You paint vividly the story and the emotions behind it.  Your passion of heart shows in this as it does in your others and is nothing less than delight to read works with so much depth in them.  

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every where
       flowers,
palms of hand,
leaves of time,
bare witness to being lonely

******************************************
To embrace the lonliness along with the emote such as you do, take that power and
use it to live and love each day to the extreme in all your color (s).  

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Gaia
2 posted 2009-05-14 03:56 PM


Your words always pluck deeply the inner heart strings that reverberate with passionate emotion. A powerfully poignant piece.

Ditto to what Mark wrote.


Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2009-05-15 02:39 PM


Bumping because there is no legitimate reason for only 2 replies.
Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
4 posted 2009-05-15 02:45 PM


Gosh this is really, really good.
ctowen
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Green Mountains of VT
5 posted 2009-05-15 03:24 PM


A master glassblower, bubbles of delight from her furnace of flames and ash. Just the right touch of air, the correct degree of turn. Not too much of the other, tempered.

It is the wait that reflects the beauty ....

secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !
6 posted 2009-05-16 09:19 PM


wonderful lines here! (for example):

“leaves of time,
bare witness to being lonely” ;

“the spirit of some forgotten art” ;

“empty vases
no longer hold   their meaning” ;

AND, my personal favorite:

“when I can look to the temple of the stars and wish upon the sky”

[as a 'Universalist' ... I can't help but LOVE that one!]

MUCH applause for this ‘penning’ !!

Greeneyes
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In Your Poetic Mind
7 posted 2009-05-16 11:25 PM


luv and hugsss to all, thanks so much for stopping y...:squueze:

~~**~~
I never let one moment define me,
I define myself by all moments and how they teach and touch me......02  

Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
8 posted 2009-05-19 09:25 AM


This is so poignant.  It's a keeper, Lauren.

Alison

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By the Seaside
9 posted 2009-05-22 10:38 PM


his dunes bare footprints
while the sea grass whispers
to its-self


the mystery of salt and tears

fill the space ,(in),between

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Oh Dear Lord, your words sting my eyes, and tug at my heart.  
It is those alone times that I take comfort in.
Your poem is like a chenille blanket, it just feels so right and so warm.

Hugs, Lauren~

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