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pen&paper
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0 posted 2009-05-13 06:50 PM



To you if you’re concerned:

It has recently come to my attention
That soon you’ll be leaving
I’ll be wondering
Why I’m even alive

Without you I am nothing
There is no happiness
Just sadness and anger
And other things I hate

It’s too soon
Too soon
I love you
I need you

Fold me up
Make me pocket sized
And please
Take me with you
No...that wouldn't be right

My place is here
In Hell
Until, if my prayers are answered,
You come back for me.

Fix it
Make it all right
Put a band-aid on your problems...
Just don’t kiss them to make them better
Because if you do…
You’ll kill me
And I don’t want to die
Until I’ve told you I love you
Fifty million more times

You’re my whole world
I let you in
Let you hold me
Because when you did
I felt special

Now I’m confused.
Given the chance
Would you love her again?
Oh…wait….
You do still.
But you love me too?
Uh-Huh.
I love you more
More than anyone ever could.
I don’t care what you did in the past
It’s not important
My dear, I need you
More than you’ll ever know
I can’t be truly happy without you
Selfish I know.

I’m scared you won’t come back for me
That I’ll be left to die
Because without your arms around me
Inside me there is no life

[This message has been edited by pen&paper (05-13-2009 09:54 PM).]

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2009-05-13 06:58 PM


Lots of emotion here...hearts can love again when given a chance...James
Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 2009-05-13 07:13 PM


Some very sad and intense thoughts here.
Though the same story is told in so many different ways by so many different writers it sometimes seems impossible to approach from a new perspective. The main idea I like here is the unconditional willingness to keep the relationship alive.

Rex

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Gaia
3 posted 2009-05-13 08:29 PM


Poignant write, exploring the conflict of losing a love you feel you cannot live without. But somehow, many in this situation move forward and learn to accept this lost, and when they least expect it, find a fresh new love step into the empty spaces of the heart.
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