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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-05-13 09:09 AM


Let me be your sixth sense
All five senses wrapped in one
Be all that you ever wanted
Be your secret, second to none

In your private garden
I tend the ripening vine
To ease the constant pain
This longing, yours and mine

To probe your depths
Utter fathoms explore
To take your tears
Turn into rain, I implore

Brush your cheek
With words from this pen
To light up your eyes
And never know the void again

Thus awaken a new day
Yield your heart and soul
To someone also left for dead
That now is made whole


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Kaoru
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1 posted 2009-05-13 09:12 AM


Enjoyed this, very beautiful.
Chalmette Guy
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2 posted 2009-05-13 09:15 AM


Thank you, K.
Mark Bohannan
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3 posted 2009-05-13 11:39 AM


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Brush your cheek
With words from this pen
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No better way to do it than with the pen.  Much enjoyed this write and it's soulful purity.

Spuddette
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4 posted 2009-05-13 03:34 PM


thats very nice.
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5 posted 2009-05-16 12:55 PM


This is beautiful.  It hopeful and makes me believe.

Alison

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6 posted 2009-05-19 11:25 AM


Brush your cheek
With words from this pen

So very beautiful... This is spirit-lifting perfection. *S*

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7 posted 2009-05-19 12:52 PM


"To probe your depths
Utter fathoms explore
To take your tears
Turn into rain, I implore"

such sweetness....

very much enjoyed

Klassy Lassy
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8 posted 2009-05-19 06:14 PM


There is pain in these heartfelt words, but hope and much tenderness...  in the longing not to live in a vacuum, but home in a loved one's eyes.   I'm very touched,knowing what it is like to be in a room with someone whose eyes show them to be far, far away.  


Chalmette Guy
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9 posted 2009-05-20 09:03 AM


I'm sorry to hear that Lassy...that sounds kinda sad.
Thanks for reading and your time to comment.
I am here for you. lol

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10 posted 2009-05-20 04:39 PM


This is a beautiful expression of the core emotions that define humanity.
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