could not (momma low-polar)

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Open Poetry #44

could not (momma low-polar)

unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

0 posted 2009-05-08 04:24 PM

inhale
exhale
mocking time
smelling flowers
that I despise
I watch the clock
and count the sighs

ignoring air
I could not die

the sun is cold
and dreams unkind
bring signs and dread
I can't deny
I squint to see
still lamp black blind

ignoring light
I could not die

I eat fresh graves
to sympathize
and choke on words
without goodbye
spit out the tears
they leave behind

ignoring warm
I could not die

I sleep blank sleep
to tranquilize
pound my fists
and try to cry
the knuckles bleed
I don't know why

that I walk dead
and cannot die

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2009-05-09 08:33 AM

Wonderful..

The walking dead..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2009-05-09 10:37 AM

Heather, this is very powerful. You have articulated the lowest low, and a life of internal struggle faced by many.
Stikingly good, in its sad tribute.

unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

3 posted 2009-05-09 11:48 AM

Appreciate the glance, Ms. Caldwell.

Thank you ThisDiamond.
I am hoping to express the deepside swing of bi-polar disorder.

Heather

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2009-05-13 04:23 AM

Dear Heather, this is so heartwrenching and poignant and ever so powerfully expressed.

It leaves impressions that won't fade away quickly ...

Love,
Margherita

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2009-05-13 05:19 AM

This -- works.

I like the rhythms and construct, the repetitions that twist, all of which resulted in an impact of a read.

Y'drain a vein slowly...and it heals.

Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

6 posted 2009-05-13 08:48 AM

I feel like you are writing about my life in one great rhythmic poem.
No small feat for a writer.

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

7 posted 2009-05-13 05:08 PM

Thank you, sweet Margherita, for your reply.

Ms. Blaze, thanks so much for reading.

((( CG )))
Glad you found something to identify with in this purge. I hope you have found a sunnier mountain side...

H

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