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The Void
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The Void |
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Eirian Member
since 2009-04-13
Posts 70 |
The darkness inside rushes out Knocks those over who dare stand in the way Blackens their soul as it seeps in Never again see the light of the day An aching void is left behind It blackens out the sun Nothing ever grows there The war inside was won Past mistakes weigh heavily The price you had to pay Nothing seems to make any sense And you’ve never had your say The minutes pass like hours The void begins to ache You wander through the darkness This beast you have to break You feel its torment daily its scars, upon your mind you long to climb out of yourself to leave the void behind but fear keeps its grip on you drags you into the abyss you fight to win your battle for the sunlight you will miss |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Wow I see myself in your dark poetry. Amazing. You...not me. lol |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Great write.. I can relate... |
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Eirian Member
since 2009-04-13
Posts 70 |
lol Im sure you are amazing also  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful write... I especially like the ending! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Passionately dark, very well rendered feelings. Love, Margherita |
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The Baron New Member
since 2009-05-28
Posts 1VIC, OZ |
You capture anguish well, as always. |
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Eirian Member
since 2009-04-13
Posts 70 |
Thank you Baron  |
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Shadow Angel Junior Member
since 2009-05-31
Posts 29New Zealand |
~ hiya Eirian, you capture the inner darkness so well in this poem, my friend...feels like the heavy dark of the black dog of depression...much enjoyed *hugs* Sasha xx |
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