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(I AM)

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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


0 posted 05-07-2009 12:25 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kaoru


I am the control you need to stay inhuman,
the fix for your addiction.
I am the wound you like to pick. I am
the intruder under your skin.
I am the blood that makes your veins protrude,
the whisper in your solitude, and the
reminder of why you are alone,
the creaking within your bones.
I am the ever-night, the chill down your
spine,
I am the slow passing of the time.
I am your cruel and unforgiving winter, I am
the fire that makes you blind.
I am
the only one who ever loved you,
and not the first not to.
I am your comfort, your suffering,
your inescapable guilt.
I am
not yours to keep.
© Copyright 2009 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity


1 posted 05-07-2009 04:04 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

A very original, powerfully impressive take on the "I am" challenge.

My compliments for this achievement!

Nice that you are back!

Love,
Margherita
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2 posted 05-07-2009 04:08 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

And I am not wind
up your skirt
though I suspect the view is fine.



I tried to pick a line but you are so very intense...to lift one out would leave a gap of senselessness.

I used the phrase of a stone-stack fence, earlier, but it does apply to your work, m'lovely.

Perfectly fitted and totally solid.


And intense.

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 05-07-2009 07:29 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

damn..I think I know you..n-joyed it K
Raindance
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4 posted 05-07-2009 08:52 AM       View Profile for Raindance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Raindance

WOW!!!
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


5 posted 05-07-2009 09:42 AM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Nice to read you again ~ Enjoyed this


ARCTIC WIND
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6 posted 05-07-2009 10:58 AM       View Profile for viking_metal   Email viking_metal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for viking_metal

Wow.

Blood that makes your veins protrude.

Mind boggling. This was a really good read.


-P

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

Earth Angel
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7 posted 05-07-2009 11:11 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

"I am your comfort, your suffering,
your inescapable guilt.
I am
not yours to keep."

~ A powerful closing to a very strong piece of writing! Well done!


Linda
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8 posted 05-07-2009 11:30 AM       View Profile for Juju   Email Juju   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Juju's Home Page   View IP for Juju

snice

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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9 posted 05-09-2009 09:18 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

This is great. You make me want to write another "I Am" or maybe just come back and read yours again.  That will work too.

Thank you for sharing.

Alison
sandgrain
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10 posted 05-09-2009 09:35 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

I'll say, WOW!  I love everything about it.  In fact I reread it just for the pleasure of experiencing it again.

God bless,
  Rae
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11 posted 06-25-2009 08:55 AM       View Profile for HAZARD   Email HAZARD   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HAZARD

This poem is addictive reading!


I had to read and read it again. I like the guttural YAWP that rings here - was it Whitman? I seem to remember - YUP just googled!
I sound my barbaric YAWP over the roofs of the world.
Walt Whitman. Leaves of Grass

I love your YAWP kaoru

Earl Brinkman
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12 posted 06-30-2010 06:17 AM       View Profile for Earl Brinkman   Email Earl Brinkman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Brinkman

Very original with a clever ending.
 
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