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skymist2
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since 2009-04-14
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0 posted 2009-05-01 09:16 PM



In years that have now slipped into the breach
of speeding light and time that simply mars
the memories recalled so clearly then
on Turner Mountain where we watched the stars.

“Look, there!” I yelled, excitement in my voice,
a shooting star blazed just before the dawn;
resplendent in its beauty and its light,
burned brightly but in seconds it was gone.

Now still, in disbelief, I find you here,  
a fading star that burned with so much flair.
Among so many others, now I find
I mourn each time I help you to your chair.  

I am a stranger now you can’t recall.
There is no past, no memories that bind.
Is there a clue to tell you who I am?
Your eyes reveal no hope within your mind.

The memories we made throughout the years
are mine; the thief has taken them from you.
But know they will be in my heart and safe,
at least until they’re stolen from me, too.

It’s time to eat, so let’s go find your chair,
we’ll talk of times we spent beneath the sky,
on top of Turner Mountain long ago,
we watched the shooting stars go sailing by.

© Copyright 2009 Anita Longino - All Rights Reserved
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Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
1 posted 2009-05-02 05:02 AM


This is so very sad but also touching and beautiful, Anita. Somehow your mother will know that you were there for her even in the worst of times. Bless you.
                                   Ida

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2009-05-02 09:27 AM


It has taken me a few moments to get my fingers moving to key a reply. I was overcome with my own memories of a loved in decline from Alzheimer's Disease. I wrote a poem about it as well.
This was tenderly ~ and poetically ~ written.
~ Fine writing from a loving heart.

Love and healing hugs to you both,


EA

Klassy Lassy
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since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187
Oregon
3 posted 2009-05-02 01:29 PM


I read this last night....sighed, feeling the love and the grief in your fight to help your mom hold on to the light.  I realized when I helped a friend with his mom, whom I also loved, that the smiles of joy when she saw me as her daughter meant everything, and it didn't matter that I was not.  Her heart knew forever, and so did mine in that moment.  In those moments is where we lay our treasures. Love is never dormant... hugs ~K

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4 posted 2009-05-05 08:32 AM


The love in this is beautiful to behold... the grief in it is heartwrenching. Excellent write!
skymist2
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since 2009-04-14
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Florida
5 posted 2009-05-05 10:17 AM


Thank you, suthern, for taking time to read and comment. I look forward to reading your work also.
Sky

Margherita
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6 posted 2009-05-05 06:52 PM


Poignant write, dear Anita.

This loss of memory is almost unbearably sad.

Love,
Margherita

Osprey
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since 2009-04-12
Posts 249

7 posted 2009-05-05 07:30 PM


'I am a stranger now you can't recall'
The most poignant line in an extremely touching poem. The overall quality of the poem intensifies the feeling of sadness in the reading.

skymist2
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since 2009-04-14
Posts 26
Florida
8 posted 2009-05-05 07:34 PM


Thank you so much, osprey, for your kind words. This was the most difficult poem I have ever written. It's nice to know it is appreciated.
Sky

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