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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-04-29 07:52 AM


were we but a sinful cornucopia perhaps
the bounty of your woman's charms and then
the hands of my man full as rams horns
and still hungry but you said there was more

if I would only venture inside your disease
and get to know the infection of your love
when it was like saliva devouring my tattoos
leaving virgin nerves raw ended and alive again

cacophonous was the silence in it's lingering
between the vertigo of your lipstick application
and the rapture of my taste testing validation
to see if it really guarded yes word permissions

in other words there, you included intentions too
but they were the muffled sound words on shoulders
that left wet breath sighs as note scatterings
musical to the belly when panted as love songs

and sacred as the gospel to our heathen hunger


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daark (forbidden)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (04-29-2009 09:30 AM).]

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Anniepimm
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1 posted 2009-04-29 08:04 AM


Oh! this is excellent work
I enjoyed it immensely
well penned..

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-04-29 09:31 AM


thanks annie
Margherita
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3 posted 2009-04-29 04:05 PM


quote:
in other words there, you included intentions too
but they were the muffled sound words on shoulders
that left wet breath sighs as note scatterings
musical to the belly when panted as love songs

and sacred as the gospel to our heathen hunger



Simply awesome! Your love songs transcend any traditional parameters ... you create a very unique sound with your words.

Love,
Margherita

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2009-04-29 05:03 PM


"sacred as the gospel to our heathen hunger"

THIS is the best line I've ever heard.

and I don't mean just poetically either.

That one? I'd be buying YOUR drinks. *chuckle*


Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-04-30 06:08 AM


ms mar, thanks special lady


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ms serene...oh hell we could just buy each other's drinks, keeping score is for the tourists...thanks babe

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6 posted 2009-05-01 09:00 AM


but they were the muffled sound words on shoulders
that left wet breath sighs as note scatterings

Absolutely fantastic!! I love the last line, too... beautiful write! *S*

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-05-01 09:13 AM


ms suthern..thak you ms
steavenr
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8 posted 2009-05-01 12:32 PM


"the infection of your love

cacophonous was the silence in it's lingering

the vertigo of your lipstick application

yes word permissions

sacred as the gospel to our heathen hunger"


...so many excellent lines in a truly remarkable write...these were just a few that I liked


Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2009-05-01 12:47 PM


steavenr..thanks for the read!!
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