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Do you remember him
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Do you remember him |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
She had a cotton candy smile and looked at him with gumdrop eyes barefoot along a gravel road she held his hand like they were kids Their fingers interlaced like swans slow motion in a midday hug they floated down a Midwest road he'll never wash that dust away She left him on a sunny day with rain clouds wrapped around his head he watched her wave a last goodbye and left him barefoot in the fog He stood there in their memories all day hoping that she'd return he took the shortcut home that night The road was just to long alone He mailed her letters everyday the way that they had promised to until one day a lady said "I think that these belong to you" And there inside a shoe box were the words that he had sent with purple wildflowers taped across each one next to her name That shoe box looked so helpless as he wrapped it in a plastic bag then sent it down the river and he watched her float away He thought they were a perfect pair two swans upon a gravel road He thought she'd last forever that's exactly what she did Sometimes he sees her gumdrop eyes and cotton candy smile and smells the honeysuckle blow across an old dirt road He wonders if she thinks of him the way he often thinks of her his first love from his grade school days Nila... Do you remember him... [This message has been edited by critical mass (04-26-2009 09:30 AM).] |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Nothing last forever CM, the memories that are deep and true always do. Beautiful write. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
First love letters are hard to forget. So much emotion. You wrote a beautiful piece here, really. Love, Margherita |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Aw CM, I smell the honeysuckle. Precious. Heather |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is beautiful and tragic all at once. I hope she remembers. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
critical mass - brings back many memories of someone left behind. Perhaps being too young, or something, but.... BC |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Critical mass that is quite a sad poem but at the same time it is a sweet and tender post. A lovely time to remember. enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
A sad but lovely poem, critical mass. Ida |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
kewl stuff CM...country western with some blues |
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