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Eirian
Member

since 2009-04-13

Posts 70

0 posted 2009-04-24 05:02 AM

Night Beauty
A woman in flowing robes walks
Steadily through the rising mist
The Moon is full and lights her way
Her skin shimmering, star-kissed
She follows a path no-one else can see
There’s a map drawn upon her heart
She feels it leading her gently along
Its been guiding her from the start
Her gentle steps do not disturb
There is silence in the air
She feels a welling in her heart
As she seeks out the Ones so Fair
There is a radiance about her
A beauty thats rarely seen
As she glides through the glistening
Night as though lost inside a dream
Eirian

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2009-04-24 07:50 AM

Love this ethereal beauty of a write!!!
In fact, I am now going back to reread it ~ and revisualize and experience it! Truly I am! Fantastic writing! ~ and imagination!

EA

Raindance
Member

since 2009-02-07

Posts 120
West Coast

2 posted 2009-04-24 08:21 AM

Oh, I hope you'll write more about her journey! I'm intrigued.

Chalmette Guy
Senior Member

since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

3 posted 2009-04-24 08:52 AM

Ok, wow...and, it's like we write of the same woman somehow. I have older poems about such a woman and such an ethereal night as this.
I like your writing style and content, and I must go read all your poems now.

Misty Lilacs
Senior Member

since 2005-11-15

Posts 1060
White Birch Forest

4 posted 2009-04-24 09:43 AM

Loved this!

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WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

5 posted 2009-04-24 09:57 AM

This is a very interesting and smoothly flowing poem. Paints a pleasant picture.

I didn't see any choice for critique, but might I suggest commas or verse separation breaks?

Nice write.
Tracey.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2009-04-24 10:22 AM

Ethereal excellence... beautiful write!!

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

7 posted 2009-04-24 10:59 AM

Dreamy, dreamy, dreamy write.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Suncleaver
Member

since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

8 posted 2009-04-24 12:08 PM

I told you that you'd have a glowing reception. This poem as I said before is full of etheral beauty.

Great work Eirian.

Eirian
Member

since 2009-04-13

Posts 70

9 posted 2009-04-25 12:15 PM

Thank you all for your lovely replies.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

10 posted 2009-04-26 03:07 PM

Enjoyed this Piece!

ARCTIC WIND

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