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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-04-20 08:21 AM


there were echoes of thunder between those limbs
that were green with envy perhaps
of the freedom of our metal wings

I glanced upward to her balcony to dream
of how heaven would be, pretending wet
to ink the lips of my parchment

she was in another man's colors of morning
wet breast reflections she kept concealed
except for her most vivid descriptions

and a promise of how her heart was there too
just under the surface beyond the lonely
breakable for the taking kind of skin

a gentle man begins what he must never finish

______________

daark (wishbone whiskey)



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Kethry
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1 posted 2009-04-20 08:43 AM


Very Profound. It touched me on many layers but did not complete me. I guess you must be a gentle man.

Kethry

Always do more than is required of you George Patton

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-04-20 12:56 PM


ms kethry..on occasion I guess I am..thanks for the read..
suthern
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3 posted 2009-04-20 04:57 PM


and a promise of how her heart was there too
just under the surface beyond the lonely
breakable for the taking kind of skin

a gentle man begins what he must never finish

Beyond the lonely... *sigh* I'd love the poem just for that phrase... but you give so much more. *S*

Gentleness looks good on you, my friend. *S*

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2009-04-20 05:26 PM


You are one of the best poets I've never met.




Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-04-20 10:25 PM


ms suthern, humble thanks lady friend!!

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ms serene..you are my nawleans idol..thank you special lady

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6 posted 2009-04-22 03:01 AM


Gentle Man,

With this poem, I am heading to bed.  Again, I will dream of words and how they wrap and weave as they are molded by an artist.

Thank you, D.  G'nite.

ali-san

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-04-22 07:44 AM


ms ali-san..sweet dreams and squishy oatmeal to you,,thanks little one
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