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Windhover
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0 posted 2009-04-19 05:04 PM



How do I begin to write and formulate an unfeigned verse?
How can I draw with pencilled line; what I cannot describe in words?
For who can etch the wakening dawn... the promise of a young spring day?
and who can hold a snowflake and describe it, 'ere it melts away?

These are such problems as I face each time I try to capture you
in words, or lines... it's just the same; you still elude me, come what may.
But, what is this elusive part of you, which never can be found?
Is it Beauty, Radiance; Grace?... or just Charisma; sweet, profound?

The answer to this circumstance would seem a simple point of view,
the key to this conundrum lies within the way I look at you.
For I should look with Artist eyes, that calculate the shapes I see;
but I would look with lover's eyes...
and thus, am lost... so hopelessly.



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1 posted 2009-04-19 08:38 PM


"but I would look with lover's eyes...
and thus, am lost... so hopelessly."

for sure, it's hard to do

enjoyed this, as always

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2 posted 2009-04-19 10:24 PM


the key to this conundrum lies within the way I look at you

This is the most poignant line in the poem.

Nice writing.
enjoyed this.

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3 posted 2009-04-20 04:33 PM


How incredibly beautiful! *S* If I had to choose a favorite part, it would be the ending... but every line is lovely and loving. Superb!!!
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