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unboundpoetess
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0 posted 2009-04-15 12:23 PM



dogs laugh at my eating glass talent
splitting teeth sneer when it shatters them
into dirty prism
reflection shards
hideous pretty in the
caviling light
carnival light
carnivore light

fleas rage sermons
confess nothing
I grin bloody
and gnash some more

© Copyright 2009 Heather - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you
1 posted 2009-04-15 08:49 AM


this makes me think of so many different things, but mostly emotions....all of them strong! It's not so much dark as it is powerful and willful...really good.
Osprey
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2 posted 2009-04-15 09:18 AM


Despite the rather aggressive metaphor of glass eating, I find a 'cool' defiance here.
Your talent does you proud; I've been eating glass for years, but without the talent for the task.
Your poems have a cryptic and magnetic quality that draws the reader to explore.

Bill Charles
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3 posted 2009-04-15 01:21 PM


unboundpoetess - I can see where you're poet name comes from for you are 'unbound', and that's a good thing...

BC

steavenr
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4 posted 2009-04-15 11:12 PM


interesting write...love the progression of this:

"caviling light
carnival light
carnivore light"

unboundpoetess
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5 posted 2009-04-16 06:02 PM


Thank you, Ms.SEA.I appreciate the feedback. It encourages me as a writer : )

Dear Osprey-
Thank you for taking the time to explore. I hope I am not being overly cryptic! I do like for the reader to be able to apply something personal to my own thoughts. And despite the talent, I have a worm's nest of scars to prove every sliver.

Aw, thanks BC-I do consider that a compliment. : )

Appreciate you Steaven, and I am happy you found something here to enjoy.

Heather

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6 posted 2009-04-17 03:30 AM


Wow! that's quite a talent and writing this poem about it is no small talent either.
                                 Ida

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-04-17 06:12 AM


unbound...enjoyed this view of you
unboundpoetess
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8 posted 2009-04-18 12:27 PM


Ida-
Thank you kindly for the wow

Dark-
Thanks for looking

critical mass
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9 posted 2009-04-18 08:35 PM


I guess I am as thick as a brick on this one.

It comes with old age ya know.

Prasad Nataraj
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10 posted 2009-04-19 12:49 PM


Very strong emotions, Heather. Nice write.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

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