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critical mass
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since 2009-03-25
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0 posted 2009-04-14 05:32 AM


Flares climb into a monsoon rain
and float down through the canopy
they howl above the elephant grass  
like white wolves on the prowl.

They claw the night back into green,
chew through the jungle shadows,
out beyond the claymores
and the coiled razor wire.

© Copyright 2009 critical mass - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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1 posted 2009-04-14 11:06 AM


Yo Critical mass,

This is grimly well written.

Keep up the good work.

Bobby

Dog
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since 2009-04-09
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England
2 posted 2009-04-14 11:16 AM


great imagery, strong poem....
unboundpoetess
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since 2008-05-24
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3 posted 2009-04-14 12:32 PM


I love your fist-in-the-gut writes.
Very nice, CM.

Heather

critical mass
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since 2009-03-25
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4 posted 2009-04-14 01:06 PM


Robert E. Jordan

thanks for the reply. I'm always writing.


Dog

Thanks and welcome to this site. I'm new here also.


unboundpoetess

Thanks for the reply.
Sometimes that fist in the gut gets me sensored. I am trying to tame this stuff down. But will try to make it interesting.


JamesMichael
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5 posted 2009-04-15 07:39 PM


Fine writing...James
unboundpoetess
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6 posted 2009-04-15 07:45 PM


Your work packs plenty of punch, but you can send me the untamed stuff anytime.
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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7 posted 2009-04-16 05:04 AM


Deeply personal write.  Beauty and destruction came to life simultaneously.
Had family there, and I remember.

critical mass
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since 2009-03-25
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8 posted 2009-04-16 07:24 PM


JamesMichael

Thank you

unboundpoetess

I will do that.

ThisDiamond
Thank you and
Yeah... It's part of a generation ignored.


Thank you all.



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