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poddarku
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since 2008-01-15
Posts 589
india

0 posted 2009-04-13 11:07 AM



Ol’ pal
==============================
A curvy creek with hovering trees.
Heavy and greasy water and small rapids.
The stream belongs to four boys fishing.
The breeze is deciphering silence.
A sandy sandwich is relished in trance.

Do you not miss those days little captains?
Do you not miss the strained ankle
while returning
and the young daughter
of the village doctor
covering you with a bandage, all over?
Do you?                     © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar
===========================================
Someone
============================================
The man who is getting down from the bus
seems strangely similar. She knows that she knew him.
The old muffler around his neck, the eyes,
weary and slightly estranged… she knows. She knew.
Some day. Some year. Some age. Ages. Times. Distance.
The windows with the known scenes are dissolving into
something from a different history, geography, time.
The bend of a blurred conception called road
moves steadily towards what is next.
She can see the moving trees and men
till she see these no more. Only a man and
something from past hinges together.
A midnight sky,
a human conversation from the time beyond
are all she can recall
and then the next stop comes where she alights.
She is to take a hike behind, back.
             © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

© Copyright 2009 poddar kushal - All Rights Reserved
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
1 posted 2009-04-13 02:06 PM


Kushal, as I said in my email a moment ago, PLEASE change the single lines in these poems to double lines, as it won't print out with single lines.

I love both poems, especially the nostalgia in the first, and the mystery in the second, but wasn't quite sure what you meant by the last line in the second poem.  

Owl

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2009-04-13 02:12 PM


Yo Poddarku,

These are interesting poems.  

I remember old pals, but being "city" we didn't do "fishing".  We did other things.

Bobby

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
3 posted 2009-04-15 02:03 PM


Ahh, thank you, Kushal!  You saw my messages in time.  It works now!  

Owl

Boshii2
Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146

4 posted 2009-04-15 05:08 PM


enjoyed peeping through your kaleidoscope of memories.
I also like to take a hike behind,back.
Kind regards Boshii2

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149
Bangalore,India
5 posted 2009-04-16 04:24 AM


Lovely memories shared, it reminds me of my childhood days too with bandages. Streams and fishing. Much enjoyed Kushal.Not to mention the doctor's daughter.
Dog
Junior Member
since 2009-04-09
Posts 48
England
6 posted 2009-04-16 05:25 AM


nice to be taken back
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2009-04-17 07:01 PM


Enjoyed...James
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
8 posted 2009-04-27 12:17 PM


Nice to discover you have been here with such beautiful contributions, dear Ku. (I was busy with my grandsons who visited ...).

The rides along memory lanes are always so fascinating.

In the second poem, I thought the conclusion meant she was so absorbed in trying to remember that she forgot to get off and thus she had to go back ... it happened to me a couple of times, while reading books.

I so love your vivid imagery.

Love,
Margherita

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