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Open Poetry #44

Two Dollar Dreams

americangothic
Junior Member

since 2008-11-11

Posts 45

0 posted 2009-04-13 08:31 AM

What do I do with these two dollar dreams
tired and terribly spent
swap them for sack fulls of penny poor schemes
hardly worth half of a cent

Grabbing for gold but behold wooden shoes
swell in the splintering rain
back to the burden of barefooted blues
singing a silver refrain

coaxing the queens but my jeans looking frayed
long in the locks and the tooth
time had its way with our wayward crusade
stealing my slivers of youth

days dribble on now I'm gone from the scene
swept by the towering tide
stuck in the middle of some in between
haggard and nowhere to hide

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2009-04-13 10:15 AM

"stuck in the middle of some in between
haggard and nowhere to hide"

I really enjoed this

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

2 posted 2009-04-14 08:24 PM

Several fave lines here-

back to the burden of barefooted blues
singing a silver refrain

and

time had its way with our wayward crusade
stealing my slivers of youth

This piece flowed nicely and I loved your rhymes.

Well done poet.
Heather

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-04-14 09:07 PM

Yo Americangothic,

No one that's haggard needs a place to hide.

They've been there, and they've seen it all.

Bobby

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2009-04-14 10:21 PM

though drawn in first by the title, I was captured by the content...this was a pleasure to read and reads well out loud. Very nicely done

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2009-04-14 11:51 PM

americangothic - these words are very true, nice write...

BC

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2009-04-20 11:34 AM

Grabbing for gold but behold wooden shoes
swell in the splintering rain
back to the burden of barefooted blues
singing a silver refrain

This flows like a song... and I love what I'm reading/hearing. *S* Wonderful work!

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