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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2009-04-10 11:52 AM


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Finally
It is stillness
I notice
And cherish most

The quiet
Significance
Of all those things
That do not and yet
Never the less
Despite being inanimate
Move

How apart they are
As though not indifferent
But ultimately conscious
Of the unimportance
Of it all

Isn’t it then
This wisdom that shines
With the morning light
In the old colored bottles
I brought back from the sea
So many years ago

On those open curtains
In an empty room
Folds flowing down
Without motion
To the bottom
Of a dusty window sill

Portraits on walls
Whose eyes never close
The white cups and dishes
On wooden kitchen shelves

All mercifully silent
While outside
The rush and noise
Of passing cars

Processing their drivers
Through another day
Toward not . . .


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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2009-04-10 03:36 PM


"Portraits on walls
Whose eyes never close"

Sometimes I want to cover them up.

I liked this:

"This wisdom that shines
With the morning light
In the old colored bottles"

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2009-04-10 04:16 PM


excellent imagery and philosophic content in this 'slice of life' impression!

MUCH (sustained) applause for this 'penning' !!

Huan Yi
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3 posted 2009-04-10 07:57 PM


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Thank you both

Recently,  I have been trying  to change my “poetic” being
as could then respond to Mark Strand and not then embarrass him.
As such, the both of us are or are trying to write for an audience
that does not yet exist.   It’s my ambition that that unknown
might be able to read  me, too, occasionally,as an example
as well, and thereby not judge all of us too unkindly.

This isn't an actually happy, or even hopeful poem
and I did not expect it to be popular.


Thanks again,

John


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Pilgrimage
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4 posted 2009-04-10 10:37 PM


I love the light on the old colored bottles brought back from the sea.  I love the whole thing, it moves at its own pace and shows me things I haven't seen before.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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with you
5 posted 2009-04-10 11:39 PM


it's in the details that you provide for my eyes, that spark my own thoughts of stillness....
2islander2
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by the sea
6 posted 2009-04-11 11:46 AM


nice thoughts, I totally agree with all the verses that you shared.

regards

yann

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