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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2009-04-10 04:33 AM


Formerly and prior to
the eventful
clouds of forgetfulness
o’er laid the land.

Oh, happy, happy, happy days
when unto men and women came
nimbus, stratus, cumulus,
as rulers of our kingdom
and dictators of our truth.

But time in its own time
and in the manner of a despot
chases all the clouds away
and leaves the happy naked
and shivering.

Then suddenly from out the blue
the clarity of mind
and the recall of other times
and I call the clouds, sometimes I do,
when naked in my love of you!

Helen / 9 April 2009


© Copyright 2009 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2009-04-10 09:01 AM


BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Helen, this is absolutely a gorgeous write in both thoughts and presentation.

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
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by the sea
2 posted 2009-04-10 09:52 AM


thoughtful and beautifully written.

yann

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2009-04-10 10:31 AM


Too cool!
What a great metaphorical reference too.
Love the sage wisdom in this.

Write'em up!

Eric

Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28
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Oklahoma USA
4 posted 2009-04-10 10:51 AM


Honeybunch, this is absolutely beautiful.
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2009-04-10 11:03 AM


Cirrus-ly, Honey, this is a stunning write!

Love 'n a hug,
Linda

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
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South Africa
6 posted 2009-04-10 01:26 PM


Thank you all so much for your kind comments.  I "cirrus-ly" (Linda, you're good) appreciate them.  

Love
Helen

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
7 posted 2009-04-11 03:11 PM


Touching and beautiful poem, Helen.
                               Ida

critical mass
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8 posted 2009-04-11 09:53 PM


Honeybunch


Nice use of a metahor

Liked this qyite a bit

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