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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2009-04-09 08:31 PM


  Deep-Time Entanglement

Beneath ever-rippling stars
finest moonlight deftly slips
through diaphanous clouds
that drift and dance
with the whims of a careless
   wind
in gathering roaming waves
above secret, silent depths
of the wide, wild sea…
all remains forever conjoined
in infinitely grand, symphonic
deep-time entanglement.

      --- b. e. adams (4/9/2009)

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-09-2009 09:09 PM).]

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1 posted 2009-04-09 08:40 PM


ok. This is my favorite from you.

"wow" doesn't cover it!! I am going to print this one if it's ok with you??

*pretty please*


Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2009-04-09 09:04 PM


Yo Secondhanddreampoet,

I'd drop the cap in "all" in the third line from the bottom, unless you add another dot to the ellipse.  It makes more sense as just plain "all".  

Bobby

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3 posted 2009-04-09 10:03 PM


This poem is just beautiful and as deep as the wide, wild sea.
                                Ida

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4 posted 2009-04-11 09:34 AM


MHO, this is one of your best.
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5 posted 2009-04-13 10:45 AM


Absolutely beautiful! *S*
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