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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-04-09 04:52 PM


Touch me so that I can feel
You do this every day
Hold me with your voice
Embrace with those words you say
To keep me from the darkest hour
Caress the veil of grief away

Touch me to the very core of me
Blessed are you with second sight
Yet you find me still unaware
I am someone lost in plight
Enveloped in your memory
And held in trance by your eyes

Touch me to bring back the color
In my world that has gone gray
Fearing the same old ghosts
Until you chase them all away
With only a knowing smile
And the little secret things you say


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Windhover
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1 posted 2009-04-09 05:23 PM


Oh, yes; I like this. Soft and gentle as an Lover's caress.
Beautifully done, Milady.

D.

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2 posted 2009-04-09 05:46 PM


Embrace with those words you say
To keep me from the darkest hour
Caress the veil of grief away
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Touch me to bring back the color
In my world that has gone gray

The gentle whisper of the plea makes it all the more powerful... Incredibly lovely!!

Chalmette Guy
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3 posted 2009-04-10 08:16 AM


Windhover...that's twice I think you've said 'Milady' to me. What the hell?
Thank you though.


Thank you too Suthern.

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4 posted 2009-04-10 09:37 AM


"Enveloped in your memory
And held in trance by your eyes

Touch me to bring back the color
In my world that has gone gray"


exactly!

loved this part.....

ethome
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5 posted 2009-04-10 09:48 AM


"To keep me from the darkest hour
Caress the veil of grief away"

I really like those lines.
Of course I like the whole meaning of the piece and how it's written.

Eric

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6 posted 2009-04-10 10:01 AM


Lovely yearning write.

(As for that m'lady reference, perhaps he thinks your first name is Chalmette, last name Guy? Makes sense to me he might think "lady".)

Chalmette Guy
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7 posted 2009-04-10 10:12 AM


Midnite, that would be a weird name wouldn't it? lol
I guess he, being from the UK doesn't like to think of a name of the place where the British were defeated by those pesky yanks?


Midnitesun
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8 posted 2009-04-10 11:38 AM


Chalmette is a French word, I think it means valley or plains? Flood plains?
Katrina did what the British couldn't do.
Mother Nature really is far more powerful than the British, and apparently can outsmart the Army Corps of Engineers too.

Chalmette Guy
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9 posted 2009-04-10 12:08 PM


It doesn't take that much to outsmart those nitwits.
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