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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2009-04-09 11:21 AM


One voice alone can make him yield
The tide of knowledge never crests
Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed

By oceans vast or far afield
The seeker shall be put to test
One voice alone can make him yield

To all rebuffs his will's been steeled
These are the truths for which he quests
Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed

A testament to those revealed
May oft' proceed as one possessed
One voice alone can make him yield

To see with eyes that pierce the shield
Which hand upon his shoulder rests
Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed

Ambition's often ill concealed
As words as these may well suggest
One voice alone can make him yield
Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed

© Copyright 2009 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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1 posted 2009-04-09 12:04 PM


You've nary gone one bit afield
Your poems always pass the test
One beat for field and one for yield!

(unless it's afield, of course)

  


Nan's Morsels Writers' Blog

varun
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2 posted 2009-04-09 12:39 PM


Well written with emotions


Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2009-04-09 12:56 PM


Nan,
Thank you for your poetic reply. I enjoyed the challenge. Now just for kicks, I think I'll pen something with two syllable yields and fields. Lol.
Doc

varun,
Thank you for your reply. Welcome to Passions

LindsayP
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4 posted 2009-04-09 10:53 PM



An enjoyable read Dr, you wrote it well.
Enjoyed.

Lindsay

Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2009-04-11 10:30 AM


LindsayP,
Thanks for the reply. The more structured forms are quite a challenge and consequently I'm not always that pleased with the results. This would be one of those, it fits the form, follows all the rules, and still comes up short. Oh well, practice, practice, practice.
Doc

Oklahoma Rose
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6 posted 2009-04-12 12:12 PM


Dr. Moose, I love villanelles. Although, I haven't gotten it down pat, yet. But, I see you are a pro.


Earth Angel
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7 posted 2009-04-12 01:14 PM


I tip my 'halo' to you! lol

Writing a Villanelle is no easy matter! Trying to write a poem in that form, is like trying to follow a very complicated recipe! ~ They both drive me to pull my ebony tresses out!

You've done a masterful job, here, Doctor!

Love & Poet Light,

EA

Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 2009-04-13 06:50 AM


Oklahoma Rose,
Thanks for the r&r.
Doc

EA,
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.
Doc

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9 posted 2009-04-30 01:53 AM


Doc Moose,

You - okay, I'll just applaud and save the gushing for another day.

Wonderful!

Alison

steavenr
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10 posted 2009-05-01 12:23 PM


very nice...very nice, indeed...loved it
Marchmadness
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11 posted 2009-05-03 06:04 AM


Wow! This is good Doc. I don't thnk I'll try that at home. I might hurt myself.
                              Ida

Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2009-05-03 08:10 AM


Doc, I loved this!! Really beautifully done...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

nakdthoughts
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13 posted 2009-05-03 08:30 AM


One voice alone can make him yield
Resolved, and thus his fate is sealed...


So true

I love form and you do it so well!


M

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