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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-04-09 10:06 AM


it is morning opening her long leg dawn
and stepping wide from her sports car horizon
she is fresh bathed from the night fires
her simmering sensuality is dew wet witnessed

and then you are there with your smile songs
where the sun touches your teeth and plays notes
only a lover could hear those sounds
but you smile slow and give me the opportunity

I kneel to worship within the temple of your eyes
but you realize my sins are far to vibrant to forgive
so you close your gaze around me and press me still
against your bosom altar as if I was sacrificial

you wear my hands over your charms like wet ink
and moan out loud how the smearing of identity feels
drinking love's water from the lips of another lover
while your thirst has already been quenched

the want to be drunk on another man's liquor lingers

_____________


daark (wishbine whiskey)

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Anniepimm
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1 posted 2009-04-09 10:36 AM


Deep and meaningful poem
I really enjoyed reading it
Thank you for sharing..

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-04-09 11:40 AM


thank you annie for the read..
suthern
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3 posted 2009-04-09 02:03 PM


and moan out loud how the smearing of identity feels
drinking love's water from the lips of another lover
while your thirst has already been quenched

I don't just read your poems... I fall into them... and enjoy every bump and bruise. *S* Powerful punch of pen here!!!

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2009-04-09 02:16 PM


ms suthern,,,,you look so cute with the tattoos..thanks babe
inkedgoddess
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5 posted 2009-04-11 11:18 AM


this scorches in the sacred of decadence
critical mass
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6 posted 2009-04-11 10:11 PM


Dark Stranger


morning opening her long leg dawn

from her sports car horizon


you wear my hands over your charms like wet ink

and moan out loud how the smearing of identity feels


Pretty good stuff here, liked it.

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
7 posted 2009-04-12 07:47 AM


ms inky...you bless me babe, thank you


____________

cm, thanks for the read and write..

steavenr
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8 posted 2009-04-14 08:40 PM


a sensually impressive write...found this stanza to be absolutely stunning...loved its layers:

"I kneel to worship within the temple of your eyes
but you realize my sins are far to vibrant to forgive
so you close your gaze around me and press me still
against your bosom altar as if I was sacrificial"

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
9 posted 2009-04-15 12:22 PM


Dark Stranger - sensual, and enjoyed reading this...

BC

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2009-04-15 06:07 AM


steavenr..thanks amigo

___________


bc, thanks bill

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