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Touches - A duet with Greenyes
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Touches - A duet with Greenyes |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Touches Brush softly, this whisper . . . the whisper of admire resting between passion and the eyes of desire I imagine being alone stretched across the skin of rivers a drop of dew through glass the hands of trees, of green -- even fall like memory between storms I lay waiting, listening -- I pray for the dream to remember: The canvas of myself longing -- for the color of life to stroke lyrics across my lobes-- in song of acceptance at the feet of anticipation the moment green (for the sea) touched blue (for the sky) around such edges of evenings where sky dances ~ I must mention we are made of fragments we drift -- leave imprints-- walk the journey -- trying to touch it all on silver wings we try to touch the rivers bend the season of air between palm and prayer the press of body between grain and sand --- yes that moment--this moment-- such as memories these memories bring a lesson a lesson where we learn to listen with our eyes to feel with our heart and see with our ears gracing us with wisdom-- the wisdom of nature and it's secrets that lead to a peaceful soul and an acceptance of self these memories, that which I've become pale ash reflections of dawn-- darkness of stolen nights ~ no matter where this all began it ends here --on the edge of soul in you, in me laced with remnant stars when I touched your hands to the grace of clay having lost my soul slow the rain will fall once again on mirrored lake while I drift in some passing memory somewhere-- a crumble of stone returns to calm Greenyes ( Lauren ) Mark Bohannan [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (04-07-2009 10:08 AM).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A very special thanks to Lauren for the opportunity and privilage of writing with her. What a natural and beautiful talent she holds within her. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
wowza...you two do some really cool music! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I had a lovely reader's drift through this with the images coming to mind easily. You are a superb pair to create together. "I must mention we are made of fragments we drift -- leave imprints-- walk the journey -- trying to touch it all on silver wings" Well, I have a few fragments out there that I wonder where they are and why I rememebr them. Some good some bad. Loved it! Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I lay waiting, listening -- I pray for the dream to remember: The canvas of myself longing -- for the color of life I first chose the same lines ethome did... but these slide even deeper under the skin. *S* Magnificent collaboration... it's totally seamless!! |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Dark...wowza back to ya...and  for the kind words...~ Hi Eric...we all do, some good some bad, but all hopefully worth it? thanks for the read...  ~ Ruth...thank you...always so good when you stop in...  Mark....Thank you too, for bringing back the muse side of me...it's been a while!  ~~**~~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
D S - Thanks much sir, your words are appreciated. Eric - So happy we could help you with a lovely drift. Thank you kindly my friend. Ruth - So glad to see you stop by and leave us those kind words. Glad you some lines that got under your skin in a good way. Thank you much dear one. Lauren - Was my pleasure as I have said and it was so nice to be challenged with your words to even try to keep up with you. right back at ya |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
This is a really good piece! ~ Enjoyed  ARCTIC WIND |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a beautiful blending of your talents here. Such imagery, such striking command of emotion and utility. I loved this...and especially this: "...I must mention we are made of fragments we drift -- leave imprints-- walk the journey -- trying to touch it all on silver wings " Incredible write! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that was some do-it - especially loved the lesson in these lines, as it reminded me of my own journey of discovery. One you get this down - it's hard not to feel small in the scheme of things. These memories bring a lesson a lesson where we learn to listen with our eyes to feel with our heart and see with our ears gracing us with wisdom-- the wisdom of nature Well done you two! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Mark and Lauren, I can't even begin to highlight a line or two as they are all incredibly beautiful thoughts interwoven in such harmony. Take a bow! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lovely Lauren and Marvelous Mark....I'm captured in the lace of your words. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Mark, I like your tiger. What are "lyics"? Bobby |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Artic Wind - Thank you. Glad you enjoyed. Kathleen - Thank you dearly. I appreciate those kind words and Lauren of course makes it easy to look good when she incorporates her words into the mix. Mysteria- You are so right when it comes to the scheme of things. Thank you much. Midnitesun - You are a dear for those words and I appreciate them much. Thank you. Martie - If we captured you then I am smiling. Thank you so much my dear friend.  Bobby - Lyics are those things called typos LOL. Thanks for pointing it out. Hope it didn't keep you from enjoying the write. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you all for reading and enjoying.... Appreciate the comments...from each of you... ~~**~~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Is it insulting that while reading this my mind wondered off on forbidden thoughts? The intimacy of this was pretty damn stunning... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Susan - Poetry should be felt when read and you evidently felt something from this, so no insult at all. I am glad you were able to be absorb into the words and I thank you dearly. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Seems to me you two are a perfect fit. I could not tell who was writing what, which is a compliment to you both.....it's an excellent piece of work and I applaud you both!  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Mark - lovely write with much meaning. Nice writing together... BC |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent! Hats off to both of you for a lovely read. Eloise |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Balladeer - Thank you much for you honor us with those kind words. Bill - Thank you sir, always a pleasure to have you stop by. Eloise - Thank you dearly. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You succeeded in a real, deep fusion of your talent, gifting us with the emotion true beauty emits. Enjoyed you both very much in this beautiful co-creation. Love, Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I picked the most perfect time to be able to get in here to read! Two of my favorite poets and people writing a most seemless blend of pure beauty together, what a treat. Gosh, I've missed reading you both. Ya'll done good with this one! Hugs, luv, and peace, ~D |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow .. this is beautiful Mark and Lauren. It's a seamless write, and drifts along in perfect harmony between you both. A lovely read. What a treasure! Best wishes, /Kit |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
This flows most gracefully and radiantly |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I wanted to say thank you all for the wonderful comments and am glad you enjoyed this. I know I enjoyed writing with Lauren as she is as I have said, an amazing talent. I apologize for not doing individual replies this round but time constraints weigh in on that. You all are appreciated as are your comments. |
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varun Junior Member
since 2009-04-05
Posts 13Punjab,India |
Really well written... I think I Need a Poem to describe the greatness of your poem |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
So touched by the comments, thank you all for stopping by and signing your name.....;loveya: ~~**~~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am absolutely breathless after reading this exquisite sharing of highly poetic ink!!! Linda |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Two evergreens entwining wind songs. This is beautiful. Kudos to the both of you. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
how can I even begin to tell you both how amazing this is?! It moves and breathes...and wow...  what a perfect blending of two of my most favorite poets....this is so much more than a keeper...I will read this one again and again... LOVE it!!!! to you both for this masterpiece!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Thank you all so much for the wonderful comments. They are much appreciated. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I love how it all flows beautifully together. It blends together so well I couldn't tell where one of you ended and the other began. I want to read this one more time before I go. Nice to see you both on my little stroll through the not forgotten blue pages!!!! HUGS!!!!!!! "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Hello Justbleu, thanks for stopping by with your lovely response, nice to see you... ~~**~~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Justbleu - Thank you for the wonderful reply and it is so good to see your name pop up. Hope all is well with you. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
You're both very welcome!!!! It's very very nice to see you too!!!!! HUGS!!!!!!!! How have you both been???? |
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