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My Brothers
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My Brothers |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Half a lifetime from the golden years and the tides keep rolling in and in the mighty waves I hear their spirit calling me again. Shaking sails and cetecean and tales of yore unfold. In the weeping wind my ancient friends keep calling out to my soul. My brothers deep keep calling my soul. I hear them call when the sloop keel rolls. Over the top I watch them blow my brothers deep are calling my soul. The big wheel kicks and the main sails grow and my brothers deep keep calling my soul. The windsongs play and the sheets fill up and the brine is in my eyes. I'm coming up with a roaring rush the waves fall into the sky. Cross the watery dawn the sun smiles in and the blue-gray turns to gold and my brothers deep and the restless wind keep calling out to my soul. Well I knew all along that we were one where the sea always meets the sky. The wheelhouse rocks on the morning run now we're rolling side by side. Over the top there's an old wild song sacred love songs of old. When the trick is done and the run moves on they keep singing on in my soul. My brothers deep keep calling my soul. I hear them call when the sloop keel rolls. Over the top I watch them blow my brothers deep are calling my soul. The big wheel kick and the main sails grow and my brothers deep keep calling my soul. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
your poem took me on deck with the salty spray in my face...really enjoyed it. kind regards Boshii2 |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I always click on your threads with anticipation, knowing I'll be hearing music in my mind as I read your words. "My brothers deep keep calling my soul. I hear them call when the sloop keel rolls. Over the top I watch them blow my brothers deep are calling my soul. The big wheel kick and the main sails grow and my brothers deep keep calling my soul." This is soooooo very Gordon Lightfoot, lovie. I'm not saying it's not distinctive either, I can just hear that guitar played like a sideway cello... And speaking of brothers? This one made me miss mine very much. He's the only guy who could make me sing when I really didn't wanna. But then? I have yet to meet you. All we need is time, time, time... *hugs, smiles and smoochies*  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Even before I read serenity's comment, I was thinking of The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald... which never fails to move me. *S* In the weeping wind my ancient friends keep calling out to my soul. Mr brothers deep keep calling my soul. Beautiful, haunting words... you make us stop and ponder and FEEL what it's like to work with danger as constant companion. This is fantastic! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The windsongs play and the sheets fill up and the brine is in my eyes. I'm coming up with a roaring rush the waves fall into the sky. Cross the watery dawn the sun smiles in and the blue-gray turns to gold and my brothers deep and the restless wind keep calling out to my soul." wow  I love this! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - as always, another terrific writing... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Eric, I was so moved by this. You have heart and soul ~ and a whole lotta talent. I'm still reeling from the feelings that this erupted in me. (When I was a girl, I lived right on the shore on Shediac Bay in New Brunswick. I am still fascinated by sea shanties ~ and sailors!) "Heave ho, out they go, with the morning tide" ~ lyrics from one of my songs. Warm hug, Linda  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Bill, This is good, and fairly well written. One little error: "Mr (did you mean “My” here?) brothers deep keep calling my soul. I hear them call when the sloop keel rolls. Over the top I watch them blow my brothers deep are calling my soul. The big wheel kicks and the main sails grow and my brothers deep keep calling my soul." Picky Bobby |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This definately takes my out to sea, Eric. Beautifully done. Ida |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Fantastic work. The windsongs play and the sheets fill up and the brine is in my eyes. I'm coming up with a roaring rush the waves fall into the sky. Cross the watery dawn the sun smiles in and the blue-gray turns to gold and my brothers deep and the restless wind keep calling out to my soul. My personal fave. Heather |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Boshii2 Glad I took you on deck. Thanks for the read and the comment. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Celeste. Thanks for the Lightfoot reference. Also for the anticipation. I'm glad it sang for you because that's a big part of the point of this piece. It's really designed for a type of group like 'The Great Big Sea' a group very popular all over Canada but especially so on the east coast of Canada. Type their name into your favorite search engine and you'll see (Sea) what I mean. Thanks love for the visit and the comments. It's always so good to read your words here. Sorry to read you're missing your brother so much. Hang in there and sing your soul out. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ruth I love that tune too. It's a classic. There's documentary 1/2 hour TV program on the wreck and it's very well done. The whole thing is tragic! Thanks for the fantastic word that's much appreciated. You are as sweet as your fine poetic expressions. Take care Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
SEA Thanks for dropping in and for the kind expression. I loved writing that verse. You're very kind and sweet too. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bill I try my best and I surely do appreciate your visits and expressions. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Linda Thanks for those loving kind words I appreciate them more than you can imagine. I didn't know you lived in Shediac. I just love Parlee beach. I'm in little peaceful Fredericton the capital. Pretty little city with the St John River flowing through the middle of it. Once again thanks so much for all the kind words. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks picky Bobby I appreciate you pointing that out and I appreciate the comments. Glad you could drop in to read this. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Why thank you Ida I'm glad I could take you on a little trip. Thanks for the visit and the comments. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi Heather Thanks for dropping in and I thank you and SEA both for enjoying that verse. I appreciate the warm positive input. Eric |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
This flows nicely, Eric. I love the ocean. I can smell the salt air. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you angellea. That's a pretty name. Glad we got the salt air across and I appreciate the read and the comments. Eric |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
I love great rhyme and this holds the call of the sea as well! I've never been sailing, but I got to watch the white sailing sloops and regattas one summer with their magic glide over a blue bay. So the waves falling into the sky really tugged at my mind. Such beautiful imagery. ~ Karen |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed this! ARCTIC WIND |
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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
awesome! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Karen Thanks for those kind words and what you see watching those little vessels is even more fun if you can take a ride on one someday. You'll never regret it. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
AW Thanks, I always enjoy your visits. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
noah j thanks for that word. It makes it all worth it. Eric |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you James I appreciate that. Eric |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A great tale of the sea my friend and most enjoyable to read. Take care. Lindsay |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Lindsay Thanks for dropping by and for the encouraging comments. Eric |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Eric, We are lucky that you shared their call with us. I like this a lot - I am not a sailor at all, but I felt the waves and the sloop roll (and I knew why I am not a sailor). I love tasting the salt on my lips though. Thank you, Eric. Alison |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Alison for those nice comments. If you tried being a sailor it would get into your blood and you'd be hooked for life. Eric |
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