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Chalmette Guy
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0 posted 2009-03-26 01:59 PM


When all other devices are laid bare
Reach out and lay both your hands upon me
No matter how far away, night or day
Feel desire as the one thing you need

I am the only one here you can touch
More than a hunger this craving you know
Sometimes seems blinding it becomes so much
The hardest part of all is letting go

Thoughts are the poison to the body’s soul
You speak in language of one to suppress
Over wrought and a need to lose control
All cast as villains fey and dangerous

‘tis the essence of a life worth saving
As you spend one more night alone, craving


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SEA
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1 posted 2009-03-26 02:02 PM


*whew*



this is awesome

A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 2009-03-26 02:29 PM


mmmmmm...I am craving some chocolate right now,
lol....but I understand the craving you speak of...

~ARH

2islander2
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3 posted 2009-03-26 02:39 PM


Thoughts are the poison to the body’s soul


I agree sometimes they are poison, sometimes they help, thank you for the beautiful poem.

yann

Chalmette Guy
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4 posted 2009-03-26 03:07 PM


Thank you SEA, ARH, and islander...I am so glad ya'll stopped by and liked this.
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5 posted 2009-03-26 03:21 PM


I like this one! ~ Enjoyed


ARCTIC WIND

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6 posted 2009-03-26 03:31 PM


I am the only one here you can touch
More than a hunger this craving you know
Sometimes seems blinding it becomes so much
The hardest part of all is letting go
...
‘tis the essence of a life worth saving
As you spend one more night alone, craving

I know... *sheepish grin* I almost quoted your poem back to you. *S* But they ache with such beautiful intensity... no poison in these thoughts, just perfection!!


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7 posted 2009-03-29 01:05 AM


I understand feeding the craving and how hard it is to let it go.  You describe it well in your poem.  

Alison

nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2009-03-29 06:50 AM


Thoughts are the poison to the body’s soul...

this is very true

M

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2009-03-29 08:25 AM


Reasoning supplants feeling ~ far too often.

This poem gives a whole new meaning to the slogan, "Reach out and touch someone."

Gosh, I wish my arms were longer! lol


EA

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10 posted 2009-03-29 08:59 AM


I normally don't enjoy reading poems that rhyme... however, I am more than willing to re-think my opinions when pieces like this are written.
Great job!

But this one goes to eleven...
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