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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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there were liquid stairs in your voice then like the sound of going higher where the windows would know the rain again you met my eyes at the highway sigh corner where there were no places for u-turns but your smile had known the locks were changed it was hard to follow you without just wanting so we took our time untying the ribbons like they were innocent places being discovered and were underwater enough to burn my tongue like sipping tea that was just a tease anyway as you waited at the top of my stare ways just to save me from the liquor of your storms ______________ daark (viscosity) |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the rain on windows...I miss that so much... enjoyed this lots D  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suesea..thanks lady!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Metaphorically perfect, DS. Nothing soothes like a good high-window rainstorm. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms midnite..thank you..they are the best kind of storms... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: This implies so much. B-rain stimulating! You are better than sudoku! Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
you met my eyes at the highway sigh corner where there were no places for u-turns When I read your words, my own seem so dull and boring. LOL Excellent!!! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thanks lady friend. _______________ ms suthern, thank you friend..and yours are far from dull or boring..they are quite rigidly whet!! |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
What can I say? Another great and perfectly unique poem. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Viscous poetry now... even when heavy becomes fairly see-through gotta love the flow of this.  |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I just have to smile everytime I read you. although, Sometimes I need a primmer to know what the heck you are talking about, and sometimes, it doesn't matter because it all sounds so cool. You have my admiration. WT. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Very cool lines with excellent metaphors ( and you know I love those ) Always a treat sir. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I think I've been there too because Lord knows I wasn't going to let anyone drown not on purpose anyhow |
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pretty1 Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 22 |
The metaphors are absolutely wonderful. Where do the words come from? Your thoughts take me back to happier times - thank you for sharing your thoughts. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
CG, thanks guy!! _____________ ms sun, thank you for the damp smile lady __________________ WT, thanks guy ___________________ mark, thanks guy for the look..and yes I do know how you like the metafours __________________ ms dixie, thank you for the lifesavor favor _______________ Pretty1, thanks babe for glancing through this window and seeing the lady smile |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D You make me smile. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanx ali-san |
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