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Open Poetry #44

A Story Without An End

A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2009-03-12 03:07 PM

"Me, love and you... Three halves of something whole,
If one is missing, everything is clear."
These words can paint the sorrow in my soul,
But once bright colors fade away in years.
Once sweet anticipation of your arms,
A shard of dreams, by now has turned to fear
Of someone else's charm.

I give you everything I have and treasure.
But I have nothing. Love is nothing, too.
Love's non-existing, as it has no measure.
I've lost my faith in it. But not in you.
This verse is just another ode to Pothos -
The guise of my own heart-wrecked destiny.
I still believe in faith, but is it worth it?
Fate's given up on me.

I have convinced us both the feeling faded,
And it is a deceptive honest lie.
At least, I - devastated, torn and jaded -
Was truly independent in your eyes.
If love's opposed to freedom - it's in dreaming -
Then love and dreams don't make one sacred whole.
And so, my past completely lost its meaning...
If I exist - and had this past at all.

turtle
Senior Member

since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

1 posted 2009-03-12 05:23 PM

Hi A Beautiful Disaster,

This is very good and I think your "Ode To Longing" is shared by many. Structurally, I think the first two stanzas are a bit better than the last, but I also think that you are a person of deep thought and....Yes a poet.

For a lost love poem, much enjoyed.

turtle

rad802
Member

since 2008-04-19

Posts 279
KY U.S.A.

2 posted 2009-03-14 08:33 PM

Good work, I enjoyed reading this.

Rick Delmonico

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