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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-03-09 08:33 AM


this velvet morrow's dawning
does it bring but the arrows
unstrung to be plucked then
as a warriors note knotting
when would fly the cupid's winding

or but a rose by windows glances
does it smile her eyes in mist
and would she know then the names
of forest's apostled from the budding red
would she whisper them to her richard's ear

as for the keeper of her quiet stones
where castle dreams have kept her charms
held in harmless capture while a joker seeks
from his own minded jaunty persuasion
just the brook of her maiden's head to famish

this velvet morrow's dawning
does it bring but the arrows
strung to be plucked when drawn
of a warrior's note then am I noted
for winding the winds of cupid's wing

affixed to heart as perhaps a lover's laughter
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daark (forbidden)




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Margherita
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1 posted 2009-03-09 10:16 AM


"Stoichiometric" in c minor ... wow the word actually exists and it sounds good in c minor.

This might be studied one day as a master example of new millenium poetry.

I will have to come back to read it again, as it exercises this magnetic effect on me.

Love,
Margherita

steavenr
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2 posted 2009-03-09 11:48 AM


"smile her eyes in mist" exquisite, oh btw, 3rd stanza...masterful
Indigo
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3 posted 2009-03-09 12:06 PM


attempts to measure
the elemental, ensures
heated reaction.

Who knew you were Mr. Science, D... ;-)

Indigo

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Inertia
4 posted 2009-03-09 07:52 PM


...and WaySexier than Bill Nye!
Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-03-09 10:37 PM


ms mar, thanks lady friend


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steavenr, thanks amigo


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ms indi...you are sure up early..does that mean it was you I saw at the window?  thanks babe


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ms nymph, you make me want to move across the street..thanks babe

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6 posted 2009-05-25 03:54 PM


So beautiful that it pretty much stole my thoughts.

A

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