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Krawdad
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0 posted 2009-03-09 03:19 AM



I just sit . . . in this dark . . . and wait . . . until dawn

there is no one here . . . not even me




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Margherita
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1 posted 2009-03-09 05:26 AM


... but here I am reading you and thus you ARE.

Gosh, dear Krawdad, your words really convey a state of being we sometimes experience. Kind of being out of ourselves. Nights can be quite long!

Good morning Krawdad!

Love,
Margherita

Marchmadness
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2 posted 2009-03-09 10:10 AM


This speaks volumes. Understood.
                             Ida

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3 posted 2009-03-09 11:42 AM


loneliness is the precursor to expectation
OwlSA
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4 posted 2009-03-10 12:32 PM


I felt every non-breath of your poem, Krawdad.  

I have felt like that before too, but in my case, it has been fear (brought on by crimes that I have been victim to), especially when the electricity goes off in a storm, or load-shedding.  

Owl

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5 posted 2009-03-10 01:52 PM


Been there. Done that. However, I doubt that I could have ever have shared that as intimately, effectively ~ and as succinctly ~ as you have just done.

Giving you a warm, understanding hug,

EA

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6 posted 2009-03-10 01:58 PM


You know - I felt this way lately myself.  Almost invisible.  Well done sir.
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7 posted 2009-03-10 08:03 PM


Almost every night I'm awake at 2-3AM, sitting in the dark 'meditating' the moment. This is when my spirit sometimes floats away into space, leaving me like an empty seashell.
You've captured that moment well, poet Krawdad.

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