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Maudlin (with winks to Sue-sea)
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Maudlin (with winks to Sue-sea) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"I think I'll paint the sky, maudlin" she reclined, considering. "The walls should be that not-quite-white with traces of the blues within..." He ducked the exhale of her smoke which painted those walls nicotine. "Maudlin's not a color, love.." and so she clamped his head between her thighs, when he dove deep. "Sure it is, a color, yes..." he sat up and he feigned interest: "What color do you see it as?" "I see it as enlightened puce." "Puce?" he tried to dive again, and met himself with no access. "Puce." She said decisively. Nodding as she acquiesed. "A muted color of wet wounds-- like wine and time and whet. The lashes of the eyes that bleed from chemotherapy and 'yes'..." He nodded as he dove again, thinking she was satisfied with his answer and his grin-- as she opened up inside. "I think I'll need some primer, too." She laughed before she sighed, "Would you roll that on for me?" She grabbed his hair and nodded "yes" as she doused her cigarette, content with possibility laughing at the sparks. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
You know my Jonny used to be a painter, right?  *giddy* I love this, my grin is so Cheshire right now  yes, tonight I think I want to color in shades of maudlin...... [This message has been edited by SEA (03-06-2009 12:39 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* Just another random thing we have in common? (Our personal list might hit 50!!!) much fun, you!  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
then I would be blessed to be like you  |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Did I ever tell you how great you are at imagery? miss ya! "...buried way beneath the sheets |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah look! I summon such sweeeeeet ghost! I've missed ya lovie. |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
You're da shizzy for realz, yo! Dis poem is off da chain! Seriously, you're like my favorite poet here. Good work. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you "tao" and I'll give kisses of gratitude, but you are kinda new...smile? Please tell me you're not one of my kids, or a friend of my kid's(za), or one of their teachers or...my mom, even???  Hey--I'm not karenoid--it's happened to me before!  oh what the heck-- thank you |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
ooooh snap! I got kissed! I'm not a student, I have no friends, you look too human to be my mom, and my penis is too small to be yours. I'm confident that we don't know eachother. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
won't the sun offset the maudlin? an enlightened puce. nice. Is it odd that I think dark and enlightenment are redundant? I am certainly glad I stopped by this morning. I feel nourished.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"enlightened puce" Karen, it's amazing what you do with words and images, how you can tweak them and the reader. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've probably read this a dozen times now. You two just blow me away... giddily. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile, thanks for the indulgence. And now? I'm feeling fairly finicky today. I'm not sure if I wanna stay in and eat a tuna sandwich, or go paint the town...red. Thanks again, folks. I love ya bunches. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Maudlin...I so enjoy cleverness. Ida |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I wasn't reading this closely enough...then, oh, my it began to sink in and I was too far along to stop and interested enough to continue...I think I'll move on...exceptionally interesting imagery...how's that for being safe...  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
drunk enough to be emotionally silly or weakly and effusively sentimental Aw c'mon that ain't right. Just ain't! That ain't what you women are talking about.......He he......Dove oh you mean that little white mild tempered bird....He he aw naw you don't mean that.....shucks I'm blushing, uh uh but I mighta been held down there too long. Quite a trip though.... Won't somebody please save me a poor poor innocent man? Eric |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Love a good poem with an attitude!! Fun to read and ponder your thoughts. |
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