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2islander2
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0 posted 2009-03-05 11:49 AM



On platforms,
no smile,
the sun forgot
its luggage.

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2009-03-05 02:17 PM


hmmmm, got me thinking

M

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2009-03-05 05:28 PM


Yo Yann,

Okay, I found the first one.  

Where are these platforms, and what are they for?

Bobby

Margherita
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3 posted 2009-03-05 05:37 PM


This is really cute, dear Yann!

Love,
Margherita

2islander2
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4 posted 2009-03-06 02:17 AM


thank you nadthoughts

yann

2islander2
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5 posted 2009-03-06 02:22 AM


Hi Bobby, imagine these are platforms for train and people don't smile, there is no sun in their heart.
Or looking at the sky imagine that the sun is on a platform of clouds, you may think it has forgotten its luggage...

just poetic  thoughts my friend.

thanks for the comment
yann

2islander2
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6 posted 2009-03-06 02:22 AM


Thank you dear Margherita

have a nice day

yann

ethome
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7 posted 2009-03-06 07:20 PM


I hate it when that happens.

Just tuning in. A neat way to look at it.

Eric

Bill Charles
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8 posted 2009-03-06 10:39 PM


2islander2 - at times the sun do forget. Nice write...

BC

2islander2
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9 posted 2009-03-07 04:16 PM


Thanks Ethome for the kind comment.

yann

2islander2
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10 posted 2009-03-07 04:17 PM


Yes Bill, specially in brittany and england too.

thanks


yann

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