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turtle
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since 2009-01-23
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Harbor

0 posted 2009-03-04 11:48 PM


Stopping By The Frosty Wood


Whose pen is this, for I should know,
Lain laden here in winter's snow.
Long still of eve, the rail and line
Now burdened down in heavy bow.

What purpose serves this empty pad
That held the host the master had;
Now occupied by empty lot
Who've shaken off their frosty clad

His orchard stands by ebon night,
Full bathed in mellowing moon light,
To set young men's heartstrings aglow.
Enamored by his pen's incite.

I stepped from steed and stood awhile
To ponder apple seed beguile
And lesser pens that find revile,
And lesser pens that find revile.

Turtle

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2009-03-05 03:28 AM


Very nice.
reminds me of Robert Frost's Stopping by Woods On a Snowy Evening.
Nothing like a silent moment being in touch with nature.

Some great lines in this.
You write so well when you come out of your shell.....Forgive the rhyme.....

But what has a turtle to do but write after staying inside all the time....(smile)...

Eric

Marc-Andre
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since 2008-12-07
Posts 501

2 posted 2009-03-05 07:01 AM


Turtle,

This is a nice rubaiyat with just the right amount of alliteration to make it work. I've enjoyed this.

Mark

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Gaia
3 posted 2009-03-05 02:36 PM


A fine 'Frosty' piece. You've captured the rhythm and rhyme well!

BTW, I posted a reply to your Q's about my ocean opus poem.
(You haven't provided an email link, so I couldn't send you a personal explanation.)
Opus is used as a generic term for a musical work or composition, and synchronicity refers to the fish and swimmer moving in harmony. Hope this clears up any confusion.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2009-03-05 04:33 PM



Well, the pad be empty never more!
~ For turtle's pen writes words galore!


Love the rhyme ~ and the reason!

Love & Poet Light,
Linda


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