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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

0 posted 2009-03-02 06:00 PM

Freedom

To show us a light
To show us a life
Show us a freedom
A freedom
of love
That will lead to our way
Show us a day
To freedom
To love
Let the world go around
Let the love become a brand new day
A brand new day of life
Let the light shine through our life
Show us a freedom
Show us a light
A light of dreams
To show us a way
To open our hearts
To open our doors
To freedom of life
Let our hearts show our way
To love
To life
Freedom

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2009-03-02 06:27 PM

Vary nice vandana
I agree.

Eric

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2009-03-02 06:32 PM

Yo dear Vandana,

This is very good, and I agree. I like that open door policy.

Love Bobby

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2009-03-02 06:32 PM

Wonderful...James

tao power
Member

since 2009-02-24

Posts 109

4 posted 2009-03-03 02:15 PM

i dont understand. this poem is funny. did you mean to take the same words and just rejuxtaposition them every few lines like that? or are you in sore need of a thesaurus?

i like naive art and poetry. Stuff that's created by people who aren't yet rendered pretentious their dubious acclaim, or locked into a form deemed acceptable by those in the know. Their vision is still pure. Their desire is still undaunted. Their work is still their joy. That's why i like the poem.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2009-03-03 02:22 PM

thank you for sharing such messages.

yann

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural