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Leave, Please Just Go
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Leave, Please Just Go |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Leave, Please Just Go outside the wind is violent screaming and shaking everything in sight winter is not leaving easy this year like an old lover you want gone lingering till you can hardly bear the thought holding on fingernail tight squeezing nothing left to give pasting skin to coldness ache fleeing room to room robbed of warmth stalked in some misguided claim whispering under breath unrequited I do not care for you, leave, please just go "I'm so hard to handle |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I know just how you feel. It just doesn't want to leave, does it? I am so ready for spring. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Indeed, coldness has many aspects, I love your comparison, dear Helen. I feel your need for warmth, you expressed it beautifully. May Spring knock at your door soon! Love, Margherita |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
I feel you pleas begging for reprieve |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes, I am cold and do not like it. meh....is it spring yet?? "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
1slick_lady - i'd love to see this leave and have some warmer weather. Tired of being couped up and getting a bad case of cabin fever... BC |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I have known this kind of cold and felt the same way you do, Helen. It gets really old after a while. Wishing you spring. Ida |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well said! I am just plain sick of this weather here too, rain, then snow, then sun, then wind that would carry me away. Be gone Winter, be gone!  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Like an old lover you want gone....He he......Well, something like that. I'd sure like to see it gone that's for sure. Good illustration. Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am one who enjoys winter ~ and that's a good thang since I live north of the 49th parallel. HOWEVER, this winter has gotten the best of me and I eagerly await the buds on the trees and a warm spring breeze!!! I enjoy reading your poetry. I always seem to be able to identify with it. May the coming Spring put a spring in your step!   Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
having moved to Arkansas in one of the worst winters, I am so ready for the leaving too enough already! good write |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear 1slick_lady, You have it right Hon. Winter can kill. Love Bobby |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Me too, I love winter, if I'm not outside that is But I do want Spring ARCTIC WIND |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
interestingly painful metaphor...masterfully constructed... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
OH! I like this one. Very sharp, very true. Of course, it's 85 today and going to be 89 tomorrow. But then it will have a high of 47 later on next week, because he just won't give up! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Super fine emotional writing...James |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I like the seasons but will admit that Winter gets a bit stale in February. Fortunately we are into March! Spring is in the air. |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Prose poem in Response Sometimes, if you don't pay attention to the most specific of things, say the way this draft on this piece of paper feels different when you try to write it out longhand than the way it felt two days ago when you wrote it out longhand on that piece of paper two pages back in the new blue notebook you got at the CVS at the market, then you are apt to forget that the cold was gone for a while yesterday. It will probably be back tomorrow. But by then, this poem will have been finished, or it may have acquired jackrabbits. The jackrabbits will have fur coats, and you can borrow them for substantial periods of time, while that idiot with the difficulty in knowing when to whisper the right thing into the pillow as you fall asleep will be busy acting just as clueless someplace else. Meantime, put on some hot water for warmth, maybe for tea. Do you drink coffee? If you can feel the pulse in your fingers, you can allow your mind to follow it wherever it wants to go. You have touched to many lovely things in your life. Pick up another piece of paper. Start again. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I greet each new cold front with the hope that they'll lower the temps in the Gulf enough to freeze the very toenails off of any hurricane that might think of entering the GOM this summer. *G* And still... I shiver. *S* I shiver at your words, too... that good, hair-raised on arms shiver of knowing I'm reading poetry at its best. *S* |
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