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Sheree
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Xanadu

0 posted 2009-03-01 08:20 PM


OH SNAP
How long did that take
Silly avion drinks the water
Seven seven ate swan singing swan
Ink blot test now
How is that?
What is this?
Ebony ravens trill playfully

How many more
Count the ravens
Singing catfish trills the time
Three more minutes
--It is not dementia
Sings the catfish

Ten now
Space space space
Seven to go
Now copy paste
Control - A, C, V
Cut, not copy
Catfish dances  


© Copyright 2009 Sheree - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2009-03-01 09:24 PM


From the beginning, I know which shows
you watch. That's good; we have a lot
in common.

Welcome to Passions!

Please, check your email for a
Very Special Welcome!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Sheree
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2 posted 2009-03-01 11:09 PM


Hi,
thank you.

But, I am not sure what shows you mean?  I only watch MADtv and sometimes Craig Ferguson.

Thank you for the warm welcome.

Sunshine
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3 posted 2009-03-02 11:29 AM


There's a show on called "House"...about a doctor...who sometimes just says, "Snap!"

If you get online with Hulu, you can pick up some of his shows.

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-03-02 03:04 PM


Hi, Sheree! Welcome aboard the pip ship! This certainly was a fun poem.

~ a singing swan, trilling ravens, and a dancing catfish! ~ What's not to like!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel

Mark Bohannan
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5 posted 2009-03-02 03:40 PM


Much enjoyed this piece and it's challenge of the mind.  Sort of brought to mind when I get handed a Mensa test to be evaluated.  I was wondering if the spelling of avion was intentional or if it was meant to be avian.  Welcome to PIP and I look forward to reading more of your works.
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Gaia
6 posted 2009-03-02 09:30 PM


A delightful write! Welcome to Pips.
As a bird lover, I was drawn to the title, and then had fun reading.  

Midnitesun
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Gaia
7 posted 2009-03-02 09:30 PM


Welcome to Pips.
It looks like the SW posted a double reply.
Anyway, I really did enjoy this first offering.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (03-03-2009 07:23 AM).]

turtle
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Harbor
8 posted 2009-03-03 12:10 PM


This is so sweet.... and crazy....I love it!

Are you writing a poem about writing a poem,or resume.... ?

Quote:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"Seven seven ate swan singing swan"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Do you mean "ate swan" or "eight swam"?

I like this Sheree, welcome to PIP.


tao power
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9 posted 2009-03-03 03:53 AM


this poem was like a manic state of schizophrenia, but in a disconcerting, disjointed way the madness sort of made sense.  Intentional or not, it made it worth reading.
Artic Wind
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10 posted 2009-03-03 03:16 PM


WELCOME TO PIP!!!


ARCTIC WIND

Sheree
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Xanadu
11 posted 2009-03-03 03:22 PM


Thanks, all.

That's funny, actually, because I'm schizophrenic.

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