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We're Ohmless Now.
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We're Ohmless Now. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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I have the electric hands, wanting to provide light. Push the energy, into your socket. Make your bulb, flicker and glow. I have the electric touch, I can make your skin light up in rows. I can make you feel the current in my body if you let me I'll be the magnets and the armature. I'll make the energy. All you have to do, is allow me the wheels. __________________________________ The Sadie Series. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
No ohms eh? Aw there must be some resistance that will make the task even more pleasurable. Great metaphorical delivery. Very intense. Watch out for that electric torch! She might not be grounded....(smile)....... Just kidding, I'm an electrical contractor that's what I do for a living so I'm having a little fun with this. I think it's great! Eric |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Ethome... Thanks, haha. Yes, I'm sure there are a few ohms every now and again, but once in a while there are feelings of.... ohmlessness.  -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 very nice.... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very lovely! Sparks is what we dream of always and you got that message through so very well. Smiling also at Eric's reply  Love, Margherita |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
SEA... Fanksh, darlin'. Marguhreetuh... Thanks very much. We can all hope, at least, eh? Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the last line! great write! |
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olijay Junior Member
since 2009-03-01
Posts 14San Francisco! |
Very passionate, i like how you follow your theme consistently. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
viking_metal - a great way to express current flow, hot electricity! Nice write, lots of meaning... BC |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Passing shadows... Thanks very much. Glad you enjoyed it. Olijay... Thanks very much. It will take some further work, but it's getting there. Bill Charles- Thanks very much, sir. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Paul, You must be some kind of superconductor, being ohmless and all. This poem is cold baby cold. Bobby |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Cold, you say? Mind uh-splanin that 'un? Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Paul, Superconductivity takes place at very cold temperatures. Bobby |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Ah, thanks for the clarification. I figured other things out of the comment. And yes, in that case, it's colder than ice ice ice... Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Ohm my soul! enjoyed the shock of it all! current-ly one of my favorites of yours. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Viking Lightening is electrifying!  I'd shake your hand, but I'm not grounded enough! lol  EA |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Steavenr... Thanks dude. I like it a lot as well. Earth Angel... I'd say you're plenty grounded. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
nice writing, viking. This poem reminds me of trying to bring a loved one from out of a pit of chronic depression. Perhaps you had other intent, but this poem was beautiful to me in this way. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Feel like sparkin', huh? Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Tao... Sort of. More like trying to bring a loved one towards oneself. But I'm glad you got a unique experience out of it. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Pilgrimage... Always! Thanks for the read. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Better ohmless than homeless, right? An enjoyably electrifying read. |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
Excellent write! ^.^ Very deep meaning. thoughtful insight and all. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Midnite... Thanks very much. You're pretty electrifying yourself. Wolf... Thanks very much, glad to have a new reader. This is clearly my most popular write ever! I never would have expected that. And as an update on Sadie... She's being hot and cold. Who knows. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
You can always do it....take my mind from the poetry snd into your bed room ,thinking of male to female fittings..( I dont care if I short circuit this page.) much love Boshii2 |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks B. You're a doll. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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