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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Still Be still, my heart tonight blur all reflections in pure white light though she's gone away from me I still keep holding on to the hem of her memory tearing and slipping away one day I won't even see her face when my eyes close so for now I drink in all I can taste on her lingering beauty I will overdose Keep cool and collected even when you're like a toy neglected rolling around useless all day I still keep hoping that she'll stumble back into view beautiful, sweet as spring to my heart she meant everything every sunray in the sky lights up the silver of her wings on she flies, too far to hear me sing Even while crumbling you'll find me fumbling for her eternal light it's the only thing that will make me live again set free the caged bird and breathe all love in I'll never give in And even when all romantic dividends come up nil I never learn, I keep on loving her still And still, and on until forever I keep the eternal flame lit for her and sometimes I don't know why but still I keep a hold on the thin thread of her memory she won't keep much longer one day I'll lose all inner sight of her but until that day I'll love her vacant, fueling fire on her smile I will paint my desires And even while drying you'll find me crying out for evidence of her she's the only one that could make me whole pull out the rose thorns out of my fractured soul love takes its toll But the chances that she'll return are next to nil but I never learn, I keep on loving her still loving her still love her still "Alone: that ain't the word, it's just a groan in the morning nobody ever heard" --Justin Currie, 'Gold Dust' |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"And even when all romantic dividends come up nil I never learn, I keep on loving her still And still, and on until forever I keep the eternal flame lit for her and sometimes I don't know why but still I keep a hold on" yes.  I know just how that feelsalways a joy to read you |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I could feel the pain reading this...very good write. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Zach, if I mentioned the name Whispering Bill, I'm fairly sure you might now know of whom I speak of, but the title of your poem was a hit song of the same name. So of course, I had the tune going through my head as I read this. His song was as sad as your poem... which means you did well.  |
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sunnyh Junior Member
since 2008-01-07
Posts 14Staffordshire, England |
This is beautiful, and very touching. As I read, the sentiments were all so familiar, as I'm sure they are to a lot of us. Thank you for the thoughts, so well put... SunnyH |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I still keep holding on to the hem of her memory tearing and slipping away" I don't think you'll ever let her memory slip away. A poignant, heart felt write, Zach. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Memories as lovely as the ones you have of her can keep you warm when winds blow cold. You expressed your feelings so beautifully. To be able to do that is a gift. May your gentle, loving heart still be open to love again when it comes knocking at your door.  EA |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"I still keep holding on to the hem of her memory." Good writing, soul drifter. Ida |
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Noel Junior Member
since 2009-03-06
Posts 42West Coast |
Holding on to the hem of her memory! That is a lovely thought and your poem is an endearing heartache. Fine writing, soul drifter. |
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