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SEA
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0 posted 2009-02-26 10:06 AM





a shade somewhere
between cotton candy
and lust’s crimson hue
stained my cheeks
when I looked at you

awkwardly in the middle
of innocence and understanding
having not a clue
my heart would forever
be hooked on you

so unsure and shy
tongue tied and terrified
wondering if you knew
every second of every day
I was more in love with you

and all these years have passed us
....still it remains constant
with every beat, it’s still true
my heart wants nothing more
than to be loved by you


~SEA~

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secondhanddreampoet
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1 posted 2009-02-26 10:55 AM


fine choice of photo.-imagery.

EXCELLENT slice of Romanticism!

much applause for this 'penning'!!

Paul D. Hennigan
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2 posted 2009-02-26 11:17 AM


i like, i like, i like..........did i forget to say i like..very nice write Sea
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2009-02-26 11:26 AM


m suesea...
you have a way of loving
that is more than words..enjoyed it

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2009-02-26 11:44 AM


Yo dear SEA,

This fits in well with the latest concept of literary expression, with no caps, and no punctuation.  It’s rather just there, as a blob of words.

Love Bobby

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5 posted 2009-02-26 05:13 PM


Very beautiful,  Oh to be loved like that!!
What a fitting gift to the beholder of your heart.

Period.

W.Tracey.

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6 posted 2009-02-26 05:20 PM


You outdo Hallmark
with every write.



Love, Mom


ethome
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7 posted 2009-02-26 06:17 PM


How could any words be more romantic and openly warm than these ones you've penned here. Love can be such a thrill.

Love your apt. Looks like you've just moved in or are in the process of redecorating.....(smile).....

Eric

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8 posted 2009-02-26 06:35 PM


SEA - you are indeed a special woman, I can see it in your writings, such as this one...

BC

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9 posted 2009-02-27 09:30 AM


Oh, I understand this oh, so, well! I have a "still...", as well!

Here are a few of my favourite creatively descriptive lines ~

"a shade somewhere
between cotton candy
and lust’s crimson hue"

"awkwardly in the middle
of innocence and understanding"

"so unsure and shy
tongue tied and terrified"


Linda

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10 posted 2009-02-27 09:43 AM


"and all these years have passed us
....still it remains constant
with every beat, it’s still true
my heart wants nothing more
than to be loved by you"


So beautiful, Susan. Sounds like it's here to stay!!
Hugs,Ethel

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Ethels Creations  My Inspirational Pages
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11 posted 2009-02-27 10:52 AM


SEA, this is an endearing writ. The third stanza is especially melodious.

Mark

Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2009-02-27 11:29 AM


Susan, do you suppose this will always be the case?  Because that thought terrifies me..what if that was it and it's gone?  

Will we remain broken forever?

me too.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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13 posted 2009-02-27 12:06 PM


Just like I always said; It takes a female to write a REAL Love poem. Beautifully done, Milady.
SEA
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14 posted 2009-02-27 06:14 PM


thank you all so much for your great replies

and Susan? yeah forever

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15 posted 2009-02-27 06:43 PM


Superlative! You take the love poem to a higher level!

art

SEA
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16 posted 2009-02-28 11:42 AM


thank you Art very much!
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17 posted 2009-02-28 11:24 PM


Beautiful!  
I so miss reading poetry....I truly must take more time in the blue!!

much enjoyed
g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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18 posted 2009-02-28 11:53 PM


Ms. SEA,

Be careful, or you'll find me writing a series called "The Deep Blue SEA."

Incredible write. I found myself relating pretty heavily. Lots of emotion, I couldn't be more hooked on you.


Paul.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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19 posted 2009-03-01 08:10 AM


Hi darling girl, remember me? I remember how special your writing always has been, this is stunning work, love the flow and the shape of this.

I miss so much being away from you all, however I cannot do all the things I want to do, time is far too short, and I no longer have the strength for it all. So I slip in every now and then and sip at the wonder and remember how special you all are.

Take care sweet SEA
Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy
x x x x x x x

Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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20 posted 2009-03-01 10:19 AM


quote:
a shade somewhere
between cotton candy
and lust’s crimson hue
stained my cheeks
when I looked at you



There is true excellence in your poem, dear Sue.
The quoted lines bring smiles, they are such a perfect description of those first moments, when one can't even breathe because of the emotion.

Love,
Margherita

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21 posted 2009-03-01 12:47 PM


it's nice to know that this exists

gives me hope

I always love your stuff!

vandana
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22 posted 2009-03-01 06:46 PM


liked it
LindsayP
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23 posted 2009-03-01 09:05 PM



a shade somewhere
between cotton candy
and lust’s crimson hue
stained my cheeks
when I looked at you

Maureen my dear, that is such a sweet poignant unburdening of the heart,

top accolades for this touching poem.
love to you.

Lindsay

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24 posted 2009-03-03 10:52 PM


Love speaks through you. This is beautiful.
I love your writing.

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25 posted 2009-03-03 11:26 PM


exquisite imagery in your fine words...my favorite lines (like many others as well):

"somewhere
between cotton candy
and lust’s crimson hue"

truly a captivating vision

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