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3 Women
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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I woke up in this sweaty factory with an existence I don't know a life altering place shards of broken glass coffin sized parapets crying my name concrete, riffed by tides, wind & green mold crawling up all those translations she spews cold heartless wind, influencing what once was a part of me choking my paintings, like a terrorist she clutches fate & destiny, with lies going beyond human nature evoking artifacts unfamiliar she creeps in the round belly of my native land, spewing thoughts destroying animated gods defining culture I'm trapped in her spinning wheel gutting me like a fish but still breathing better to be burned alive then to enter heaven with remorse she can tear away my soft tissue but can never wash away heavy weighted granite memories I have know this woman before, and before that and before that to... she lives in a friendless box coveting souls it is my punishment, because I've known something she could never touch except in fairy tails, that she was to aloof to read... dirt roads linger long after she's gone red lights blinking her center stage she is all that man fears torrential downpours stripping clean human frailties & limitations like a raven eating road kill her soul hums while she spills blood I am no longer afraid clutching the roots in my belly thankful for birds that spread seeds of adoration... You see, What she doesn't know is, I've spent many hours in those clinics where old women smiled while bandaging my hands I awaken standing next to a crib she is no longer there though I feel her marks of prophecy that died a slow and miserable death I am conscious of her nose that drips soprano rile and thunder laying in her bed of pretend ...and I am thankful |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lee, I enjoyed reading you again. I always know that no matter what your subject is, I will read part of your heart. I've missed you. Hope you have been well. Hugs, Ethel Ethels Love Poetry My SpiritIsUp Poetry Shelf Powered by CGISpy.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and I'm thankful too... it's been a long time since I've had the feeling that I've been thrown down a flight of stairs, but you did it... and it was GOOD! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ahhhh ... so very nice to see your name here. This was trademark LeeJ penning and the whole was a wonderful treat but this .... ----------------------------------------------- "I am conscious of her nose that drips soprano rile and thunder laying in her bed of pretend ...and I am thankful" ----------------------------------------------- Now that is supreme. Excellent read and as I said, so wonderful to read you again. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear LeeJ, It's good to read your stream of consciousness poetry. Love Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Though this is somehow disquieting in content, I adore your unique style, as you well know and I am so happy to read you again. You were much missed, dear LeeJ. Love, Margherita  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
There's so very strong powerful feelings expressed in this piece but it holds the reader so very well. Eric |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
whoa this was captivating! |
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tao power Member
since 2009-02-24
Posts 109 |
I only counted two women. Am I missing something? There's you, and what's apparently an evil baby. Who's the third? Maybe I'm missing something. This poem really is frightening. Trying to find the third woman is making me paranoid, like she's stalking somewhere between the lines. I can sense her, but cant see her. If this was your intent, then I stand and applaud you. If not, and I'm way off, I still enjoyed it anyway. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lee, you're baaack! ~ and with a vengeance, so to speak! lol Yanno, girlfriend, yer brilliant! ~ and what a command of the English language! That was English, was it not?!? lol Your creativity continues to astound! You've been missed! Oh, and thanks for the ride! I feel as though I just got off a "Whirl-a-Twirl"!  Love you! Linda |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"like a raven eating road kill her soul hums while she spills blood" This powerful, intense write reaches deep inside, LeeJ. Hoping all is OK in your world. I've really missed reading you, lady. |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
This is wonderful and rolls off the tongue. |
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