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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2009-02-23 12:34 PM


(* * *)

© Copyright 2009 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2009-02-23 03:50 AM


It's OK sweetheart, it would be your first in my mind.

Eric

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2009-02-23 05:54 AM


it was pretty bad...


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2009-02-23 08:24 AM


in fact?

I'm wincing...

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2009-02-23 09:44 AM


Yo dear Serenity blaze,

This is one of your better ones.

Just pulling your long, lovely, leg Hon.

Love Bobby

OwlSA
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5 posted 2009-02-23 10:59 AM


Yes, I agree - and I didn't EVER think that I would ever think that about a poem of yours - but then it is all a joke anyway, so you cheated!  

(Whispering, "there's not much you can't do, Karen, but writing a bad poem is one of those things - you simply don't know how!).  



Owl

Mark Bohannan
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6 posted 2009-02-23 11:07 AM


It's o.k. I wince every time I shave.  Now I will just have to sit here patiently waiting for the good version. tapping toes on side of head
Juju
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7 posted 2009-02-23 11:28 AM




Bad poem:

I am sad
I walk to the park
I walk home
I now understand

-Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

steavenr
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8 posted 2009-02-23 11:17 PM


the only bad poem is the write not penned, the heart never shared...inspiration takes root in a variety of soils...will look again for 'nother...
icebox
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9 posted 2009-02-24 12:12 PM


roses are red
violets are blue
this poem sucks
so what!

See...now THAT is a bad poem.  

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2009-02-24 03:49 PM


serenity blaze - wow, h'mmmmmmm, this is an excellent one, great to read, enjoyable, touching, and etc...... Bravo, more of the same I say...

BC

turtle
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11 posted 2009-02-24 08:15 PM


Quote:
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Written text

The asterisk is used to call out a footnote, especially when there is only one on the page. Less commonly, multiple asterisks are used to denote different footnotes on a page. (i.e., *, **, ***)
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Soooo. You're playing footsy?.....lol


serenity blaze
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12 posted 2009-02-24 08:21 PM


Grin.

Look, Kacy! I made a turtle come out!

(No matches, either!)

And I'm wondering if I'm gonna set a record for replies to ...the dreaded asterisk.

Kamla? Take note, if you be around in some other guise, that is.

And turtle, while yer down there, howza bouta pedicure?


Blood.Wolf
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13 posted 2009-02-24 08:58 PM


haha, turtle.  The poem itself is not that bad.  lacks content though...  ^.^  better than your other poems!  (just kidding)

“For the strength of the Pack is the Wolf, and the strength of the Wolf is the Pack."
~Rudyard Kipling

serenity blaze
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14 posted 2009-02-24 10:11 PM


Actually I tend to agree that it is better than the majority of my poems.

I don't think what I do actually qualifies as poetry, in the strictest sense.

It's lyric, it's prose, it's narrative, and a lot of it is crap.

I just hope it's entertaining crap.

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15 posted 2009-02-24 10:38 PM


((*^)) Happy Fat Tuesday - love the pic!
XOx Uriah xOX
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16 posted 2009-02-25 03:02 PM


I love the unlimited content
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17 posted 2009-02-25 03:28 PM


Hi K....
Love the photo!!
Huggies,
Ethel
Some of my poetry links--

Ethels Creations  My Inspirational Pages
Ethels Heart Poems  
Ethels Love Poetry
   My SpiritIsUp Poetry Shelf



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ethome
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18 posted 2009-02-25 06:07 PM


OOOOOHHHHH Dahling how could you wite a bad poem.

I remember when we used to sing this together...


We skipped the light fandango
turned cartwheels 'cross the floor
I was feeling kinda seasick
but the crowd called out for more
The room was humming harder
as the ceiling flew away
When we called out for another drink
the waiter brought a tray

And so it was that later
as the miller told his tale
that her face, at first just ghostly,
turned a whiter shade of pale

She said, 'There is no reason
and the truth is plain to see.'
But I wandered through my playing cards
and would not let her be
one of sixteen vestal virgins
who were leaving for the coast
and although my eyes were open
they might have just as well've been closed

She said, 'I'm home on shore leave,'
though in truth we were at sea
so I took her by the looking glass
and forced her to agree
saying, 'You must be the mermaid
who took Neptune for a ride.'
But she smiled at me so sadly
that my anger straightway died

If music be the food of love
then laughter is its queen
and likewise if behind is in front
then dirt in truth is clean
My mouth by then like cardboard
seemed to slip straight through my head
So we crash-dived straightway quickly
and attacked the ocean bed  

Can't possibly be anything wrong wit cha!

Eric

serenity blaze
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19 posted 2009-02-25 06:17 PM


*laughing*

Ya'll are all so lovely.

thank you for the fun.


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