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Something Whooshed....!
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Something Whooshed....! |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Something whooshed...! On a planet, in a country, in a state, in a town, on a street where a lampost shines and the houses, very warm, quiet dreamers in their sleep like a hush after church bell chimes. Something whooshed...on the wind in the distance. Something galloped in the lime moonlight -and its wings cut the air -into slices of Fear which it tossed in the night with delight. And I shivered with a tremble and began to disassemble with the fright now fused to my bones. -Slices landed on the rooftops, -slid across the treetops and fell down to cartop domes. Out my bed, 'cross the floor, thru a window did I spy down the street from that lamp lurking light, came an eerie fog creeping, 'cross the land was it seeping, into beds and blankets and the sleepers of the night. Then the church bell rang! Clang! Clang! The church bell rang! Clang! Clang! In its cloud came the hoofbeats thumping like heartbeats pulsing to a blood-beat time, -as the whoosh of its wing flaps -turned cold my blood saps freezing in the vessels of my mind. Fog seeped at a fast creep crossing onto my street's curb over lawn, more and more -while sliding past the fireplace, -creeping up the staircase, thumping down the hall to my door. Some human headed hoofed thing, half bull-half wing, eyes froze in fire-flicked flames, -just reached out from the mist, -grabbed me by my arm and wrist and pulled me, screaming, in the fog in pain. I jolted from this nightmare, awake and free of frightmares, gasping for some air or wake-up push. -Rushed to my window just to breathe. -The night air filled my lungs with ease when eyes and head turned left.....……..and Something whooshed ! Namyh |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Namyh, This has some fairly good end rhymes, and I like the story. Love Bobby |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Namyh - dang, what a great tale, had me on the edge of my chair reading this... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You had me fearing for your life then I woke up too......LOL! Whooose! That was a relief! Eric |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
great stuff |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the rhythm of this is awesome, and the story held me till the end!  very much enjoyed! |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Bobby – If you liked the story and you liked the rhymes, I won’t ask for more. Hope it put a smile on ya. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
BC – You did good BC. I fell off my chair twice just writing it. So very happy this grabbed ya. And thanks for the “dang”. It put me back in the chair. Namyh Eric – Sometimes you never know what’s gonna catch you taking a nap or daydreaming or just screaming in a regular nightmare. Glad you woke up for the relief of a Whoosh…..! Hang in there Eric. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Boshii – Ahhh Shucks Boshii. Thanks. Namyh Sea – You should have seen the rewrites. But if the rhythm held an awesome grip on you ‘til the end, then each rewrite was worth it and your enjoyment is the reward making me proud to be its author. Thanks Sea. Namyh |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, gosh, the last line has it in it!!! Great write about nightly terrors! Love, Margherita |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
There is certainly nothing wrong with your imagination Namyh, terrible things those nightmares. Lindsay |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Margherita – Amazing the influence our fears have on us as well as our loves. So very glad this made an impact and that you enjoyed. Thanks. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Lindsay – Maybe imagination is the window we poets use so others can look in and see Beauty, Honor, Despair and Love etc. and where nightmares reveal as much as daydreams.Thanks for your words Lindsay. Namyh |
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