The Troubadour's Kiss (sonnet)

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turtle
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Harbor

0 posted 2009-02-15 12:46 PM

The Troubadour's Kiss

A satin kiss, a simple smile,
Is all love needs to glint and glow.
A velvet touch, to add beguile
And passion climbs that high plateau.
A silky rhyme, a reminisce,
Can add the charm befit this love.
A heart endowed with raptured bliss
Will flutter softly, like a dove.

This heartfelt song, I sing to you,
Will float upon eternal flame.
A troubadour's refrain is true,
When lips of longing speak your name.
I strum this whispered serenade
To you, in precious love's persuade.

HelmutB
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1 posted 2009-02-15 01:06 AM

Very nice work and so entangling!
Excellent

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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

2 posted 2009-02-15 02:50 AM

Well done, I enjoyed the read.

Gloom

Nan

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3 posted 2009-02-15 10:05 AM

This is lovely. Sonnets are my all time favorite format - tetrameter OR pentameter.

Nicely done, turtle..

poddarku
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india

4 posted 2009-02-15 10:24 AM

I specially like the second stanza

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2009-02-15 11:21 AM

SAVED faster that you can say "Love Song"!!!

Turtle, you may be a Slow One, but you write one pretty love song! This is perfection ~ romantically and poetically!

You have the heart with the pen to match!

May your everyday be Vee Day!

EA

turtle
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since 2009-01-23

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Harbor

6 posted 2009-02-15 02:44 PM

Thanks guys

This is a sonnet form that was popular around the turn of the 20th century. I think it's my favorite for a sonnet
for several reasons. I like the one stanza break at the turn, it makes the change in direction more pronounced
and it flows the conclusion into the argument suggesting that his beloved has no decision to make, or other
conclusion to reach. It is also the only one I've found that has examples in both pentameter and tetrameter.
Tetrameter, of course, being the most comfortable meter for me to write.

turtle

Dark Star
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Lost in your eyes

7 posted 2009-02-15 03:19 PM

mmm

GothicCherry
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TN

8 posted 2009-02-15 06:05 PM

Awwh, I really loved this..

Suncleaver
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9 posted 2009-02-15 06:43 PM

A beautiful write Turtle. I thoroughly enjoyed this.

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Pilgrimage
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10 posted 2009-02-15 09:21 PM

I sometimes think in iambic pentameter. It can be hard to shake when you get caught up in sonnets. I like this one very much.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

turtle
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Harbor

11 posted 2009-02-16 02:27 AM

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

12 posted 2009-02-16 06:22 AM

lovely~~

M

steavenr
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13 posted 2009-02-16 12:17 PM

as with others, this is a real delight...nothing like a sonnet to remind you of why you fell in love with poetry to begin with...very nicely done

Marchmadness
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14 posted 2009-02-18 02:02 PM

Now this is romantic poetry at it's best.
Ida

Blood.Wolf
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15 posted 2009-02-18 11:38 PM

Very beautiful poetry. I like it very much.

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