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my heart, my heart
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my heart, my heart |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
My heart, my heart, you only were bubbles, that girls blew with their delicate eyes. My heart, my heart, you only were kites that pulled the girls in the winds of words. My heart, my heart, you were watches around the selfish wrist of girls, I never cared about time. My heart, my heart, you only were excercise books wrote without dreams, words without perfume. My heart, my heart, you were only bouquets of still flowers and unfinished memories, of thoughts unhappy as thorns. My heart, my heart, you wake up finally, a rose spoke to you, a rose broke loose from gardens of past, my heart, my heart symmetry rises above the sun. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, Good work. This is a lovely poem, and I like it loads. Bobby |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Bobby, for the kind and supportive comment yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There is such a joyous flow of energy in this beautiful poem, dear Yann. Your heart sings love. Love, Margherita  |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
I loved this poem. Good work Islander. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Good Yann And somehow very French John . |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
2islander2 - enjoyed the words in this write. Very nice... BC |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
very beautiful. I noticed it kind of lends itself to song. However, it's probably best not to change anything too much!  P.S. If you're not a composer, and you would like to try, I could attempt it.  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Margherita for the kind comment. hugs yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks suncleaver for the kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi John, is the form french or the sentiments ? thank you for leaving a kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Bill your comments are appreciated. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Blood Wolf, it is very kind, I will be very glad if you could compose something... thanks for the kind comment. yann |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I really liked the way this one step us through time sort of like watching the growth of a child finding it's way to an understanding and then finally finding what was there in the beginning but being able to accept it for it's own purity. I will have to re-read to see if I took the right turn or not but non the less, I can say I really enjoyed it and it gave my mind a good exercise on the thought process. Well done. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautifully sad, happy and nostalgic simultaneously! I love it, Yann. Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Markk this is really an homage I appreciate, your comment is very supportive and I am glad to find such an inspiration in my poem...Thank you very much. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Owl, for leaving a kind comment. have a nice day yann |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
nice write...I like the progression of it and the time you took to tie it all together...it reads the story well... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
My heart, my heart, you were only bouquets of still flowers and unfinished memories, of thoughts unhappy as thorns. My heart, my heart, you wake up finally, a rose spoke to you, a rose broke loose from gardens of past, my heart, my heart symmetry rises above the sun. Now, that's just about as pretty as it gets. I loved the perspective. Cleverly done. Eric |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Yann, there is something so special about your poetry. It is uniquely ~ and creatively ~ expressed, and I find it exceptionally intriguing. I usually read a poem two or three times. The first time is to take it in ~ and the second time is to experience it, and the third time is to simply enjoy it! I appreciated the ascension of this poem about love as a blossoming rose. I felt as though you were taking me on a journey that ended up high in the sky! Love is finally in full bloom!  May love be your constant companion in life!  Linda  |
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nina1522 Member
since 2009-02-14
Posts 189 |
good job. a bit confusing but thats ok i still liked it |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
I always like this sort of poetry. Very creative and lyrical. turtle |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh Yann.. this is gorgeous! I love it! Happy Valentine's Day RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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