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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression

0 posted 2009-02-12 07:36 AM


Who loves not the flowers that bloom,
The way they brighten up an old room
And spread about their sweet perfume?

Yet when they linger and slowly dry
And are not as pleasant to the eye
Do you just trash them with a sigh?
What of the memories?

Are you not moved by a lover’s touch
By that certain someone that means so much
By the caress or kiss or other such?

Yet when the cold takes them away
And that chill of missing numbs your day
Can you just shrug and be on your way?
What of memories?

Gloom


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2009-02-12 08:14 AM


Wonderful and poignant questions, dear Professor Gloom.
Mourning is necessary for our loved ones when they leave us, as well as for the flowers when they wither. I always say "thank you" to the flowers in the moment of disposing of them.
And the same we have to feel for a heart who once beat in unison with ours and doesn't anymore ... "thank you" for the gift.

Memories remain, as fresh as ever, but besides occasional tears they also induce smiles of gratitude and happiness.

No shrugs, no, never indifference!

Love your beautifully expressed thoughts and again I send you a big hug.
Margherita

Raindance
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since 2009-02-07
Posts 120
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2 posted 2009-02-12 09:24 AM


Dear Gloom, This is a lovely sonnet of mourning and touches me very personally. I'll keep it on my writing desk, as your words express what mine could not.  Thank you.
gilead
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since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067
nevada, USA
3 posted 2009-02-12 11:22 AM


It is good to be true about the other side of beauty---the wilting of the flowers, but it is also good to appreciate the persistence of that which is beautiful---the continuity of life. I like the honesty I feel when I read your poems.

Thanks,

art

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2009-02-12 01:16 PM


You're in fine form lately, Professor Gloom.
I am enjoying.
                          Ida

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
5 posted 2009-02-12 01:54 PM


Yo Professor Gloom,

This is a lovely write.

What form of sonnet is it?

It's okay to make up your own form.

Bobby

Professor Gloom
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of Depression
6 posted 2009-02-13 06:12 AM


Thank you, Margherita,
I am pleased that you enjoyed these words

Thank you, Raindance,
Truly high praise you offer for my words,
I am honored

Thank you, gilead,
I write what I see around me,
I am pleased my vision in words is so well received.

Thank you, Marchmadness,
Although I have continued to write, prose over poetry of late,
I always tend to return to poetry in posting

Thank you, Robert E. Jordan,
As you know the forms of a sonnet are varied
With the only true requirement that it is 14 lines,
I have adapted this form to my expression
which is a variation of a the 4, 1, 4, 1, 4 style
that was popular in 17th century Europe.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
7 posted 2009-02-13 06:12 AM


sometimes I hang the flowers upside down to dry them out and then save them...sometimes

M

suthern
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Posts 20723
Louisiana
8 posted 2009-02-13 11:07 AM


I have boxes of dried petals, still more boxes of photographs... and memories almost as vivid as the events that birthed them. *S* They are all treasured. *S*

Wonderful write!

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
9 posted 2009-02-14 01:09 PM


Gloom, I enjoyed your poem very much and was very touched by it.  I also enjoyed the responses, especially Margherita's.

Owl

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