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gilead
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0 posted 2009-02-11 11:44 AM


The skinny little girl,
dancing in the rain,
splashing in the puddles
on the cold, gray sidewalk . . .

Barefoot in winter—
she has the good sense,
not to wet her only pair
of shoes . . .


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gilead
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1 posted 2009-02-11 11:46 AM


The event was very real, but the shoes imagined. She is often at the 7-Eleven begging for change.

art

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2009-02-11 11:52 AM


Yo Art,

Now you owe that kid a pair of shoes for using her as a subject for your poem.

Pay-up.

Bobby

gilead
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3 posted 2009-02-11 11:57 AM


Good point, Bobby; I do give to her and others in the hood. Poverty is complex.

Thanks,

art

gilead
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4 posted 2009-02-11 12:09 PM


There's a guy nicknamed Bobble Head, who comes by every Wednesday, for a bag of eats, and a few bucks for pocket change. He suffers dementia, but for all I know, he could be using the dough for crack. So many do.

art

Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2009-02-11 12:23 PM


Yo Art,

There’s really nothing that complex at all about poverty.  If you find yourself going through garbage cans to find something to eat, then you know you’re in poverty.

Bobby

Margherita
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6 posted 2009-02-11 12:24 PM


Real life very softly rendered, deeply touching and compassionate, dear Art.

A coincidence: my son has discarded a few pairs of his "beloved" gym shoes this afternoon. We thought they were in too bad a shape to give them. I put them into the waste box down in the street and moved to the box for glass and disposed of the empty bottles. While doing so, a young man approached and to my surprise he just saw the transparent bag with the shoes and was "analyzing" the possibility to take them ... and actually took them. I asked him discreetly if he wanted a few fleece jackets and t-shirts from my son. (my son is discarding finally things he did not wear anymore, because too large or too small). The young man said yes and waited til I came back with the things, inclusive an old, but still good Henry Lloyd jacket.

I notice there are more and more people who search for things in the waste boxes ... even for food! It makes me blush to think of this. There are too many people in need!

Thank you for your great sensitivity, dear Poet.

Love,
Margherita

gilead
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7 posted 2009-02-11 12:31 PM


I'm referring to the societal problem of mentally ill people who really need help, and people who are just lazy and looking for a handout, but are often getting away being misclassified as mentally ill. I have known many of them. They're pros at working the system. One example---being legally prescribed psychotic medications, and selling them on the street to people who really are, thus exacerbating the problem.

art

gilead
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8 posted 2009-02-11 12:35 PM


Thanks Margherita. It's kind of disappointing when you give to the poor, but know that you're not solving "the" problem, just doing something to be caring and socially responsible. Your comment really puts it in focus.

art

vandana
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9 posted 2009-02-11 12:37 PM


enjoyed
Robert E. Jordan
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10 posted 2009-02-11 12:41 PM


Yo Art,

How do "YOU" tell the difference.

Bobby

gilead
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11 posted 2009-02-11 01:47 PM


Can't be 100% certain Bobby, but we use experience, and street smarts to make those subtle distinctions.

Thanks,

art

gilead
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12 posted 2009-02-11 01:58 PM


To make a long story short, Bobby, I'd rather unknowingly give a buck to a person who doesn't need it, than to prejudge someone who does need it, and deny them. Anyway, we're a work in progress, in need of much improvement!

art

Robert E. Jordan
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13 posted 2009-02-11 02:55 PM


Yo Art,

I'm sure you do a good job of taking care of the folks in your hood.

Here in my hood, I can't refuse anyone.  Folks here in the hood have done way too much for me in the past.

I'd likely be dead without them.

I'm sure you feel the same way.

Bobby

gilead
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14 posted 2009-02-11 03:13 PM


You're right on, Bobby! I know some wonderful people here, and we look out for each other.

art


Earth Angel
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15 posted 2009-02-11 06:38 PM


Art, this entire thread is fascinating. I'm like you in that I do not judge whether someone is needy or simply playing a con game. I help out where and when I can, and in good faith.

I believe in the 'haves' helping the 'have nots'. With the economic down-turn, the number of 'have nots' is increasing, while the number of 'haves' is decreasing.


Linda

gilead
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16 posted 2009-02-11 07:58 PM


Thanks Linda, you've nailed it! You've prescribed a simple and practical way to be charitable.

Always appreciate your thoughtfulness, and those (big) little pick-me-ups you bring!  

art

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LindsayP
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17 posted 2009-02-11 10:17 PM



Linda is right on the button Art,

I totally agree.

Lindsay

Bill Charles
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18 posted 2009-02-12 07:12 PM


gilead - this is a very telling write. Much to dwell on after I read it.

BC

Marc-Andre
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19 posted 2009-02-12 10:48 PM


Art, these two stanzas are both touching and chilling. And they made this reader ponder them for quite some time. Mark
HelmutB
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20 posted 2009-02-12 10:50 PM


Smart Girl?? Very nicely done. I can feel the cold

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  


gilead
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21 posted 2009-02-12 11:17 PM


Thanks Bill for reading and taking the valuable time to comment. It is much appreciated.

art

gilead
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22 posted 2009-02-12 11:19 PM


Ah, I really like your thought of her being a smart girl, and in real life she is, just poor, that's all, and no fault of her own.

Thanks for the kind contribution.

art

gilead
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23 posted 2009-02-12 11:25 PM


Thank you Mar-Andre, your emotional response affirms my feelings as well, as in my watching her as I drove past in the January rain, and when I got home and watched in warmth from behind my window. It was a happy/sad scene, and I have no doubt you know what I mean by it.

art

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