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ILoveTheRain
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0 posted 2009-02-10 09:04 PM



Fiery depths within the soul

Cast temptations of self-destruction.

The carrier of the soul, timid with fear

Smoothes the blade over her flesh.

She can’t put it down, won’t put it down.

Anger rising throughout her bare body.

Lying in the bathtub, water running.

Deep in thought, curiosity of the other side

Adrenaline running through her veins

Images casting out all of her emotions

She throws the blade across the room

Takes a deep breath…

And slowly submerges herself

Under water, Undead.


© Copyright 2009 Jessica - All Rights Reserved
gilead
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1 posted 2009-02-10 09:09 PM


I hope it is a baptism unto a new awakening!

A fine, dramatic write!

art

ILoveTheRain
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2 posted 2009-02-10 09:15 PM


You totally caught the message! Good job, and thank your for your kind comments.
Robert E. Jordan
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3 posted 2009-02-10 09:56 PM


Yo ILoveTheRain,

This is hard to read.  Try it in black font.

Bobby

gilead
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4 posted 2009-02-10 09:57 PM


My pleasure! I appreciate the opportunity to read and share thoughts.

art

ILoveTheRain
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5 posted 2009-02-10 10:02 PM


I'm sorry, Mr. Robert, but I don't know how to change it. Could you try highlighting it to see what happens?
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